This was very well written. I loved the Ja-Kal angst, especially his persistence and ability to tell when things were wrong when the others were so naive. It's an interesting concept, the guardians being defeated by a modern day ailment. Sad, but beautifully executed. Well done!

omg this is amazing you are a great author please write more mummies mabe happy ones :P :D

This is very well done, I really like your story.