Aw, I was sad when I saw that this wasn't finished. I'm so used to just reading straight through your stories. Oh well...something to look forward to.

Nice sequel. I can't wait for the rest!

Hey, there are more crumbs here than on dA! I'll have to start reading to catch up! No critique, as yet, then. Just a question (lazy that I am): Are the chapters different in any way also? Due to different policies at the two sites, or something? Or are they identical?

Feudor/FeudorLaurent

That was dark. Older Kim is truly messed up. Mad but still a highly efficient leader.And she is wearing the skin of a person. The height of fashion for despots.

Read you later.

I had to Google "Dutch Oven" to see what the joke was, and to tell you the truth, I can't see Kim doing something like that. Now, Shego is a different story. She could blow the roof off, like Edgar Marsala in "Catcher in the Rye", but not KP, she's a little too prissy for that.

Well, the absence of capital letters aside, very nice chapter, and you really established the gulf between the two Kims with the last bit. Except, of course, it means that the 'real' Kim can be capable of such things, which is disturbing.

okay you officially scare the the ** out of me, I don't even want to know how you came up with that idea.Also future Kim is just plain ** sick yet I can't wait to see what happens next.I'll be more than happy to get those thoughts out of my mind. I'll never look at a villains cape the same way again!

now THAT was a fantastic twist. the innocuous villains cape given a very chilling personification.

Oh holy **... that Future Kim is real sicko... one hellish woman... the devil's incarnation if ya will.

Never would I have imagined what "material" she used for her cape.

I think I'm gonna puke now.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

A genuine Drakken Leather Cape. That's f*cked up. But, so is everything else here. So par for the course.

This is seriously F-ed in the A, Weird. Wow.

Well Written, though.

Public bathrooms, man are those always a potential assualt on the senses. Oh Shego gets to meet her alternate shelf. Boy is she in for a very ugly meeting.

Read you later!

Very good fighting sequence. Oh yeah it was neat to see Shego being so full of rage.

Read you later!

yay chapter!

and ew, I know those sorts of bathrooms, which is why most travelers learn to tolerate going in the bushes or holding it ungodly long periods O.o

Good use of smell... most authors seem to ignor that sense

Man... dude I can seriously say that if Shego seeing her alternative self didnt freaked out then she is one hell of a woman indeed.

But I bet that if Kim had REALIZED who the woman in the hallway was then SHE would have fainted.

am I right?

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

“Does she have a nice **?”

“Excuse me?”

“Her **. If someone’s going to go to the trouble of cloning me, they’d better get the ** right.”

“And the boobs. They’d better have a nice heft.”

LOL! F-ing Classic! Seriously, I can't think of anything more Shego. Even when she's momentarily detained she's still... well, Shego (with a capital S).

Shego should have had her own show. She and Drakken made that show -goddess knows it wasn't the Buffoon or -no matter how cute/hot she is- KP (warped by the "imagineers," ie. crack smokers at Disney.

Don't even get me started on the HORRORS of rest stops. I don't know what it is, but every public toilet from NC to Maine is a superfund site of unspeakable evil: wall-to-wall, and even coating the walls, dirt, ** and urine.

I remember one summer trip to visit my grand parents lake place outside Camden, ME. It was so... bad, I eventually went in the bushes for the total of the trip up and back.

MAKE WITH THE PAYBACK A$$ KICKING! The Supreme One and Abomination are long overdue for a hot dose of brutal justice.

very good at making S.O.'s arrogance come through, and at keeping the fight from rising into a kind of DBZ-style power creep that easily could have resulted where battlesuits and superpowers are involved.