Wow! this was an amazing, well planned/thought out plot. I wish there were more fics like these here.

Though, wouldnt the first Haruhi and Kyon met be that time "thee years ago" when Kyon helped Haruhi make that message on Tanbata? But I guess they didnt really meet. Ah well. I still loved it. 8D

this was a terrific story. it was very original and i could definitely feel the turmoil as kyon was struggling to find his way back home. but i feel that the epilogue left way too many answers unsaid. what simple clues was koizumi talking about? what role did yuki play in all of this? wat did kyon actually do to get back? wat had he figured out in the other dimension that dealed with randomness? i really hope you decide to write more haruhi suzumiya fics because this one was a great read. laterz

Hey there. I'm feeling much better now so thanks for the support, I guess. lol. On the bright side, I did not find any errors, let alone flow-stopping errors, in the last chapter and the epilogue. So kudos to that.

And I'm really sorry but I have to agree with your initial reaction that the last chapter did seem a bit rushed. You probably could have drawn out the events in there a bit more and probably make it into two chapters. I just felt that you could have done more with it, that it, based on how you have written all the previous chapters. Again, sorry to rain on your parade. =/


Now for some semi-postive things to offset that.

I did like the talk about things not being random. A topic very Kyon-like. However, I was hoping that it would lead to a deeper meaning that would be used to save the world, err dimension.

I loved the nagato bit in the epilogue. I don't think she'd raise her voice over the music.

And similar to what a previous reviewer said, not mentioning exactly how Kyon made it out of the new world and back into the old world was a good choice. Very Haruhi-esque. Although like I said earlier, you could have used that whole "random" topic in ,say, the scene during the 'earthquake' as perhaps a key conversation of sorts between Kyon and Haruhi.

Overall, I still think this fic was well-written and one of the better ones out there. Hope to see more from you in the future. And good luck with the submission of the story. Over and out till next time,

KeRose ~K~(@)

I luved it all,and i don't have any questions cuz u narrarated in Kyon's POV very well,and u explained everything!AWSOME job!This has to be one of my Favorite Haruhi Fanfics!

Well, I guess it ended on a light note.

Not much of fluff, but it winded and dazzled nonetheless =)

I think it was a good idea to not explain how Kyon saved the old dimension from being annihilated. It'd just be too confusing =D


Congrats on this story, Kori. Hope to see more wondrous penmanship form you =3

I absolutley(sp?) Luv this FanFic!Its awsome!! Plz update as soon as u can,I can't wait for the next Chapter!!

I wonder if saying "John Smith" would affect anything to this make-shift copy of Haruhi.

Love the story by the way.

Sorry I didn't review the last chapter, I read it long ago when I was sick and totally forgot to review. On the bright side, reading the story brightened my somewhat dim day of sickness. =)


And for this chapter review. I running out of any more new praise to give you. Simply put, I liked it. BTW the previous chapter was awesome too. The way you altered the poem was very clever. I still can't figure out what half of it means though.

Very refreshing in this chapter to seem like we are getting closer to an end. I loved Kyon and Emiri's private talk scene. It was narrated really well and is very believable. Additionally, the plot seems to thicken even more which, personally, I like. I knew there is something wrong about Kyon trying to correct things to the way they were.

Fave Quote:
When bored, talk to your stalker. LOL

Some corrections:
Usually when one has a restless night, let alone five, it begins to ware on them. I think its "wear"

She mentioned her organization would be interested in hear what I had to say. Interested "to" hear?

It goes with skipping meals; all for the sack of research and saving the human race. I think its "sake" not sack.

before your world reaches it’s peek. "peak"


That's all for now. See you next time.
~K~(@)

Well... perhaps the next chapter charge was premature... ^^;

Meh...

Update soon... but until then... I'll be rereading rereading chapter 7!

And I was most certainly not kidding about the legendary fic status. This deserves far more attention than it recieves.

Wow. Just... Wow...

That was... whew... that was FREAKING AWESOME.

Epic win, man. Epic win. Not just for having LEWIS AWESOMETASTIC CARROL in it, but for bringing the reference into the main plot, something few authors can do successfully.

If I was gonna make a list of people on this site who will end up being world famous novelists, you'd make the top of the list.

Anyway... Onward! To the next chapter!

Nice chapter. Did not expect the author of the note to be Koizumi. Not one bit. And your opening monologue about time passing was very good. Defintely in the spirit of our contemplative Kyon. Nice work. Still wondering how Kyon is gonna get through this even after that mysterious clue. But, I was re-reading the first chapter and I'm wondering if him getting out has anything to do with asking Haruhi to that dance?

Some more mistakes/corrections/comments I picked up:

"then remembered why it was making sound."-insert an article between 'making' and 'sound' like 'a' or 'the'?

"safety blanket, you could say.” The metaphor suit Haruhi well"- suited or suits?

"The thought of having anything physical with Koizumi made me cringe, but it was still only a figure of speech."-LOL

Anyways. Great Chapter. Hope to see the next one soon.
~K~(@)

Awsome fic, and I loved the way you had Taniguchi go through his data base of women. Can't wait to see you continue.

I have a distinct feeling this is going to be one of those legendary fanfictions that people read over and over again.

Update soon, and good luck. ^^

Good start so far on the story. Don't be afraid to delve into Kyon's personality a bit more though... He's a bit of a closet otaku in the light novels and generally makes alot of thin cracks on things.

I do find it interesting that so far Kyon has to figure out this himself. Hope the "black box" doesn't serve him the answers - be nice for Kyon to show some brain powahs.

Keep up the good work!

@notes posted as ch7

Update soon! ;)

-_- Ahem, please forgive lazy reviewers they are .. lazy... :)
Very nice story progres and great plot ideas - top note fic.

PS.
As I was re-reading fic.
In chapter 5, 2 small typos:
"my, rather large, text book and with full force through it at Miss Asakura."(thrown?)
"“When you mad Miss Suzumiya angry,"