aw that was a cute story.

I really liked this one shot. I thought it was funny. :)

Very multicultural A/N! Yeah, I'd go for your pen'orth :) (old fashioned way of saying your penny's worth).

Again, very very cute. My favourite line for this was the 10 fingers and toes- "I counted"!

You might want to watch your it's, its and its', but that's the only real criticism I can make without being unbearably pedantic. Otherwise, your style of writing is great and, crucially, very readable.

TSG

excellent story!

Jenni

Dude, if this chapter was in BD, it would have made me love it.

But since it wasn't and it just skipped from the change to Bella waking up, it made me angry.

I love your stories :)

You should rewrite all of BD in Edward's POV.

This was, I think, the most uplifting "transformation" scene I have read yet. It didn't make me feel like killing myself or something. It had just the right combination of pain, hope, and wonder that such a momentous moment would have for our beloved Edward. I so hope you intend to continue through the entire transformation, the awakening, and then the emergence of vampire Bella, straight through the cottage scene. Your writing is THAT impressive, and well, DAMN GOOD! Please post more asap!

Gil. My thoughts use the currency of Final Fanstasy games. lolz.

this was cute.

I think it was perfectly written-exactly what could've gone down. I liked how you wrote Edward's thoughts. Shot, I liked. D

Awesome! I love your portrayal of Edward's New Daddy pride. It brought back memories of how my husband shined after all of our children were born!

Rose is really sweet in this. I love that too!

love love love it!

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I though it was a really sweet story. Care to continue for the res of the book?

I only have one word for you:

AMAZING.

I really liked it!

I liked this. I think my favorite parts were Edward with his daughter, all those moments, and Nessie biting Jacob, that was great. I also like that Rosalie changed and was ready to be more loving toward Emmett, kind of grew up, that was nice too. Great story.

That was awesome... I totally love it