Beautifully written.

Your writing captures the thoughts so well - this is so believable as to how these orphan children probably must be feeling.

The worst part is the fact that we know its Asef and he is pure evil but the children think he is good and have no idea - clueless innocence.

Love it.

the sad thing is that that is prett much how they would think... i thing. but idk cuz im not there, but still. its good tho

This is a beautifully written. I love the perspective and how novel it is, despite this being from a book. I gave little thought to how the orphans would react to Assef. Maybe scare them a little? I don't know. But yeah. This is amazing, and I can very clearly imagine the children doing this.

That was so good! It was so sad that the reader knows the 'man in the sunglasses' is horrible but the children do not.

ROH