Very cool fanfic. I love your style of writing - you wrote and worded it wonderfully, and you made almost no mistakes too. - The plot was awesome. I'm sure there's quite a few people who would like to see a sequel. .

Write more soon! :-)

Finish! Really, I want you to finish! This is really good!

OF COURSE YOU HAVE TO MAKE A SEQUEL! You have to make a sequel. If you don't, i'l i'l well, let's just leave it at YOU HAVE TO MAKE A SEQUEL TO THIS! 'kay? Good.

One mistake: You have to be 14 to get a job, not 16. They changed their policy recently, I think.