First off, I just realized - the "it's" in the description should be "its". :3

Okay. ON TO THE ACTUAL STORY. Good chapter. Mostly filler, but hey - what with the events, there isn't much to do about that. As for improvements... Nothing, really. :\
Although, the colon when Lethe was telling Ranulf to release the kit should be a comma. Alternately, it could be changed into a semicolon by making the sentence into two, if you're so inclined to go that direction - something like, "Well, you like her; you release her." Semicolon method might improve flow a bit.

As for the chapter 1 changes, good. See no problems in the chapter now, other than the fact that it still says, "Fin" at the end. ;)

Hmm interesting concept. So far so good! Keep up the fic and let's see how it will go from here.

Great chapter!
I hope that Elincia will help them!
Keep up the great work!

I loved this... It's a great, short read. Great for a oneshot, but it could easily be extended, if you were ever interested in doing that.

Other than that, I can't really say anything not already said... I agree that the detail on the shore scene could have been more descriptive, and hyphens would improve its liquidity, but I thought this story was adorable, haha. Lethe and Ranulf were very in-character; kudos!!

Great story!
It was cute!
And Kitsune is a good name for the baby fox!
Keep up the great work!

You gotta admit, you made a pretty cute fanfiction.

XD kits, pups, and kittens ARE known for following people around, and are usually able to find help, with their cuteness.
=) Good chap, if oneshot, really good, if series, then another chap would be good...

LIKE a enigma inside a riddle inside a puzzle THAT IS STUFFED INSIDE A FLUFFY CUPCAKE! XD and it is DELICIOUS.

D'aww, it's adorable. :D
Good job on the fic. Cute concept, and everyone was in character.

It was a little lacking in description, however - you could have gone more in-depth with the events, especially the part at the shore.
Also, hypens are a wonder of grammar - they're useful for separating sentences when commas look awkward. Take this part, "The humidity was really high too, Lethe liked it though, and it's why she loved Gallia so much." Commas are worn out, even though it should have a break before "though". For example: "The humidity was really high too - Lethe liked it, though. It's why she loved Gallia so much."

All grammatical nitpicking aside, good job. Long enough to get the story out, not so long as to drag on, and good characterization.
In conclusion, I love it, thanks so much for writing it for me. ^^