lol! i loved this story. it took awhile to read due to the length, but i dont care. and for some reason, i think you wrote this while drunk. ((i couldnt resist))

"Well, there's also quite a few other things on it, too," Squall told him. "Here's a drawing of a big tree, and there's a few stars scattered around, and here's his self-portrait. Oh, and right under it, it says 'Laguna Rocks'. And-"

and this part.

"BUMPY," Fujin commented.

"Yeah," Zell agreed. "It's kind of a rough ride."

"Oh!" Selphie giggled. "What you said-"

"What are you talking about?" Zell demanded. Then his eyes widened. "Oh. I didn't mean-"

"SILENCE!" Fujin thundered, blushing.

I hail you as our new savior of shaving (ya gotta love talent shows...). Your stories make me happy inside. Really.

"Forget so much you're DEAD!" LOL soooo funny! I read this ages ago on GIA and finally found it here, so I just had to give it my infinite praise. And if 'Kiros' magic watch' isn't the funniest gag ever, then I must be drunker than you!

Funny! I really liked it, and hope to read more of your stuff in the future! Unfortunately, my brother's waiting for the comp, so adios!

I guess the Zack/Shiva bit! Omg laughed the whole way thru.

err ... this fic was well-written in a way ... you had a rather cute plot, but as you rattled on and on, the story got kind of old, and i had to force myself to continue reading it, for the sake of reviewing this fic.

your grammar and spelling - flawless. you just need to work on your plot and the way you bring out the story. ) besides all that, there were several bits which i found hilarious. )

Weeeeeeeeeeeeh! Fun! Nice break from studying for exams! But I really think you were drunk for a looooooong time if you could write this all in one go _ Very nice! More?