 Mika Uriah 2009-03-16 . chapter 1I'm probably going to get flamed by people for saying this..but..wow..you know the pairing kind of works on a sexual level. Good job on writing, on how much they care for each other, and genuinely love each other. Weather it was just as brother\sister or more so.
seriously, good job.
Mika. |
 Bluetiger 2008-12-08 . chapter 1Ha, well *looks around even more guiltily than last time* I kinda like this pairing too. :)
This is a nicely written oneshot, and the storm was an interesting idea for the background. ^^
I have to confess that I felt that the mutual attraction between the siblings, under the circumstances, felt a little too sudden and therefore just a little bit forced. I just mean that I find it hard to picture that, when they're tired, cold, wet, and fraught with worry over their missing friends, that they can take the time to admire each other, in the way that they do here. Still, it was quite hot, in a very, very wrong sort of way, lol, so thanks for writing it. ;)
Oh, and poor Hakoda, I guess he'll be wondering just what happened back at home, during the long years that he was absent. :D |