GREAT JObs,,Nice idea

Very creative way of writing. Excellent job! Hmm, I kind of sound like a teacher grading a paper...anyway it was very good! :)

It confused me at first, I'll confess. But after my brain understood what I was reading, it actually added to the excitement of the scene! Things seemed to go fast, like a ticking clock nearing the drama! So, in the end, I really liked it.

Ths is really interesting! I like it alot. Its really unique and well put-together. Amazing!

Interesting... a little hard to follow, but it got easier as I read on. My favorite "tercet" would be

"Bella!"

"Edward!"

"Jacob!"

Overall, excellent job!