Ahh... LunarEclipseShipping. Always interesting to see what Darky and Cressy think of each other.

Let's do this fast... Good Grammar, only one spelling mistake (absolete- it's at the very beginning), the plot was based off the DPP anime and was executed well, and you didn't focus on the storykillers that are Ash's group.

Unfortunately, the sentence structure occasionally was weighed down by unnecessary repeated references to balance, and it could have been longer.

Rating: 4/5

"she'd stopped speaking to him. This was a side effect he hadn't seen coming."

...how much do they interact? Look, you've set it up so he spends all his time hanging out in the cave, and the switch to as if they're normal teens who hang out all the time is jarring. Besides, he's just been doing this for weeks without her knowing, so he must have spent those weeks out of contact with her. How is another three days of not talking a huge deal?

More, the dynamic is just...forced. If he likes causing suffering, then the reason he did it isn't simply boredom, it's that he likes causing suffering and doesn't like being stopped. Now, if you'd set it up so he was as tired of causing nightmares as she was of stopping them, or that he was only fulfilling his side of the bargain because he liked seeing her again, then I could see this. But it really doesn't feel like it's supported properly here, and the fact he enjoys hurting them while she hates having to fix it suggests any relationship between them has serious issues, and makes it unclear why he even likes her.

This really sort of had a moral in it, you know? But also, I just sorted out that it could also be interpreted that one should always follow tradition, which isn't always true. *shrugs* I just thought of that randomly, nothing big.

Anyways, I like how calm feeling the beginning was, as it told about all that had happened without getting really worked up about it. It was as if someone totally indifferent was telling the story before the real "acting" part came where the "actors" played their part instead of their actions being "narrated". (Lol, I like metaphors) And then, when we went to the talk between the two, it gave you a bit of a relief after you got all worked up reading the "indifferent" part, or at least it did to me.

Hm, this is rather long... *shrugs* I guess I just had a lot to say. Or maybe reading "The Metamorphosis" by George (I think) Kafka just made me think a bit more. XP

Lots of dragon-y love (and cookies!),
~DL ('Dragon Lover')

1) I loved the concept of Darkrai doing something slightly different from the status quo.

2) I also loved the fact that this didn't end up too fluffy in the end.

Though I didn't really enjoy the episode, I enjoyed this fic. :3