I'm impressed by the poem.

Awesome! Very meaningful with each sentence, yet with such few words.

Rather ominous. and not half-bad for poetry. Great start. please update soon.

Don't feel ashamed-- though not what I had expected, this was actually really good! We don't get enough poetry about Hyuga in particular and Naruto in general, so this was a welcome change. Plus, I think you've channeled something of the old masters in here; Was Kipling an influence?

Loved the title, even though I had long predicted someone would use it for the twins. And hurray for a Hiashi filter, and an update!

Never seen poetry on FF before, I give you a cookie for boldness.

not bad for poetry~