I liked this. To me clan Hyuuga always seemed to be a caught in an awful catch-22. They have the seals to preserve clan secrets, to keep the clan safe from attack from outside and from destruction from internal strife. The clan has insured that there will never be a Hyuuga version of Itachi, but at the same time they have insured that they will not be able to enjoy their "peace."

I'm impressed by the poem.

Awesome! Very meaningful with each sentence, yet with such few words.

Rather ominous. and not half-bad for poetry. Great start. please update soon.

Don't feel ashamed- though not what I had expected, this was actually really good! We don't get enough poetry about Hyuga in particular and Naruto in general, so this was a welcome change. Plus, I think you've channeled something of the old masters in here; Was Kipling an influence?

Loved the title, even though I had long predicted someone would use it for the twins. And hurray for a Hiashi filter, and an update!

Never seen poetry on FF before, I give you a cookie for boldness.

not bad for poetry