It's good. Can you write another chapter about the team's reaction? And how Ziva will cope since she loves him and all? :)

thank gosh for your sequal i wouldve cryed if tony just died like that ( poor tony! i love you and tiva

Yay! Tiva! Yet another good story of yours!

PLEASE, PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL! That was so well written

WTF! i'm glad that tony didn't die, whew! all that aside, a sequel would be great, good job!

That was really gr8(great) so nice. i liked the ephiphany that Tony considered it as a warning that death can come any time and wait for no one. i loved the elevator crashing down aspect. Love It D

LOL you could use a beta but its a good story idea. I couldnt stop laughing at Tony/Ziva at the end and my dad now thinks I'm nuts.

nice story. can you write a sequel

I really liked it after I found out Tony didn't really die! Great, you should continue it!

haha lol i liked it

Hi YosemTiva,

Now that chapter I really liked. It is indeed a story inside a story, but why not, I think it is a good idea. And actually, why not even extend it, now that they know of their feelings for each other... It was good to start off like that, as you rightly said, you never know what will happen tomorrow, so make the best of today.. Great writing, looking forward to the follow-up :)

Interesting story.

I liked it.

And I love a happy ending.

omg keep going please!

its really good...but I don't want Tony to die! can you have some miracle and that he is saved PLEASE!

other than that its rely rely good:D

Interesting... the story is well written, unfortunately I do not like the content :( But keep up the good work...

Ziva don't use contractions!