Tsk, tsk. Xion? I must say, that was a surprise to me. I remember out little conversation about here. :) I'm on the fence, though, so I'm (hoping I'm) not biased. All that aside, you really put a soul into the character we have so little of.

Namine-ish, yes, but frankly that is how I see her. Xion seems quiet, reserved, but with an innocent touch. There's turmoil inside that she can't very well express. If this is to be the Xion we see, then you have already mastered her, my friend. :)

I really loved the sections you added. It was like a recipe for inevitable disaster.

Beginnings - The start of something forbidden
Catalysts - An untimely climax renders an unexpected verdict, which leads to...
Deviation - The abnormal catalyst causes it all to change in an unpredictable pattern.
Laughter - Born of the deviation, the result is unexpected and even a little harmful.
Quell - A last ditch. Trying to cover up the mistakes with something else. And failing.
Collapse - The fateful end that they tried their best to detain.

Wow. That in itself is brilliant, Angie. I'm sitting here just BLOWN away! The aspects you introduce in your stories are always fresh and exciting but this one is also, dare I say, revolutionary?
NeverNeverNever have you failed to present us with top notch entertainment and wonderfully thoughtful pieces of literature. Yes, I am calling them that because they are /seriously/ something special!

Now that I’m done fanning over the aspects of the story, maybe I can get to what you actually penned. :D Bwaha, your awesome fries my brain cells. All there of them.

The first paragraph really caught my attention. Each little section had their own /thing/ that they focused on and the first paragraph was about the spark between Axel and Roxas. I wonder if those “…purple skies and orange sunsets” were a bit of déjà vu. :) One thing is for certain, likkle Roxas is a diamond in the bleak rock that is Organization XI.

“That starts everything, puts it all in motion. Something akin to rusted clockwork.” – This line I really liked. To me, it illustrated the perpetual “use” of something that was forgotten, AKA their hearts, even though they didn’t have any. They were trying their best to exercise emotions that weren’t really there.

“…they get along with painted grins and itchy fingers.” – Another illustration of the aforementioned. They couldn’t really grin from happiness, so they were kind of fake… and itchy fingers that are eager to do /something./ My assumption is to inspire emotions and feelings that, as I said before, weren’t really there. )=

And the last paragraph in Beginnings, WOW! Poor Xion. This is where I began to compare her in my head to Namine. She sits silently suffering as she watches her best friends try to please one another while she is left out. )= Especially since she “silently wished them well.” -sobbith-

The Catalyst had me uppity. From the moment you started with the raw fulfillment, I suspected that Xion would be emptied in one way or another. What a shame it had to be like that.

The Deviation was directly linked to the Catalyst. After Xion found out about Axel and Roxas, I can only imagine what was going on in her head and non-existent heart. I’m happy that Roxas at least felt guilt, because it was kind of wrong of Axel and Roxas to do what they did; leaving Xion out of the loop like that. Not that I’m suggesting a threesome, but how brutal would it be to discover your best friends had moved on without you? When Axel and Roxas could turn to one another with deep dark secrets, Xion had no one. And she was left alone. D:

Fourteen-hundred-twenty-one is probably her favorite and most comforting number, too. :/ Poor babeh! This story REALLY made me want to give her a cuddle or five. D:

The Laughter. Axel’s breakdown tore at me. He was loosing /everyone/ precious. First Xion and now Roxas. The way this story was set-up gives me reason to believe that /maybe/ Sora wasn’t the only motivation for Roxas’s divorce of Organization XI.

And you are a S00PER GENIUS for recognizing the contrast between Axel and Kairi! =D Now I’m going to spend all afternoon drawing parallels. LOOK WHAT YOU DID, ANGIE! 8F -foams at the mouth-

-COUGH-

Poor 3m0 Axel! D= I wanted to give him hugs too! By Quell, he was in so much pain. I hate to say it, but it was kind of self-inflicted… Roxas played his part, but if he had aired more on the side of caution, he wouldn’t be in such a mess.
Then again,
This is Axel we’re talking about.
When is he cautious?
Neh, I just don’t want to see him so hurt. T.T

The end was almost a relief. Poor, poor, POOR AXEL! D8 He was suffering so bad. His demise almost seemed to alleviate his pain. It was like he just didn’t want to exist anymore and totally disappearing would make it all better. And that’s just sad. D:

He better get his butt over to the Next Life. Pronto, buddy.

This story had the kind of tragic beauty that only you can write.

LoveLoveLove it. :3

BEST OF LUCK TO YOU THIS SEMESTER! =D -Leigh

P.S. Come back to us soon! D: -whimper-

First time reading something with Xion in it. Still a little iffy with her character and all, what with all the goss on her being the AkuRoku Nightmare. But I still loved it anyway. This was a new perspective on her role in the Org. Very refreshing.

1. Beginnings

Love this 'beginning'. I mean, 'painted grins and itchy fingers' is a great quote. Another one is "Something akin to rusted clockwork." See how great an author you are?! I mean, seriously. You can't deny it. Already, the story takes a sad turn, with Xion wishing the two 'lovers' well.

2. Catalyst

Jeez, voyeur!Xion. Not really, but I like how this makes the story so much more twisted. How Roxas and Axel's union is so base, and Xion is the perfect actress. Brilliant.

3. Deviation

I love how this focuses on their 'feelings' what they /do/ feel... what they don't. How Xion counts and then leaves. Leaving the other two without...

Oestrogen! (English spelling! XD)

4. Laughter

It makes him feel all the more as though he's drowning.

Beautiful. S'all I can say to that.

5. Quell

You've really thought about this. I like how you link Kairi and Axel. The 'second-rate' silver line is just so poingant. Adore it.

6. Collapse

And this is why I love Axel. He always /tried/ to live life. He held on, even though I'm sure he didn't want to. One thing, though.

I"m sure he won't be forgotten. ;)

-Tasha :)

(Well on my way to record-breaking heights!)

Beautifully written. I definitely like how you put Xion in here. Even though none of us knows much about her yet, I think you got her personality almost perfect. Xion needs to start showing up in more stories since she is a big part in Axel and Roxas' lives. She can't really be ignored. I never noticed the similarties between Axel and Kairi before until you pointed it out and it makes a lot of sense! Both were left behind, but only one got their friends back; the one that had the heart. Great job. I really like this story.

I don't know how I can repay you for being such a wonderful person and providing me with a bountiful display of riveting, simply heart-wrenching stories.

I envy you vocab... ^^

~Autumn

i can see why you titled this 'three ghosts'.
this was really, in effect, about three non-existent people who don't really have happy endings.

oh, you wrote Xion wonderfully, in my opinion. so thumbs up for that.

i feel sorry for Axel. at least he died a hero. and he can fade away with his friends. and cool, i never realized the contrast between him and Kairi.

aw~ so im not really sure how i feel about Xion yet but this was really sad~ poor her~ and poor Axel~!! at the end it was super duper sad face~ hahha tears and everything~ ahahah♥

I don't think you murdered her at all, it was a wonderful sad story. And I never did realize that about Kairi and Axel.

It's kinda sad in a way.
But beautifully written as always