Easily the best story I have read from your collection. It was fantastic, I have never played the game, nor heard of it until I read your other ME story, now I have to get it lol. I loved your wording and the nice tie in with the mistake quote, very nice. I missed the tragedy tag, now i'm sad. you know what that means though? it means you did a good job, the purpose of fictional writing is to convey Ideas thoughts and emotions to the reader, you have done this with an experts flare. Congratulations friend!

Firstly, I really liked the story and your style of writing, descriptive, detailed and interesting.

Secondly, in my opinion falling of the roof is the more probable way of dying for a Runner than being shot for example. When remembered that they spent a bit more time on the roofs than hanging out with Blues. So points for that, too. (Though falling of the roof is maybe the nastiest possible way to die.)

Poor Faith practically got the warning, just a bit too late. Hmm...

But anyways, really good job!

Gorgeous. A piece written with such resplendence, its hard to believe. A flawless example of how an author doesn't need to rely on adjectives to pull them through. You've got brilliant talent!

First review, so don't take any of this to hard.

Number one, nice story. You portrayed the characters right. You even managed to get Merc's accents right (unlike some other stories I have read.) I have merely one complaint: When you said Faith did a somersault after jumping onto a building, that is not technically correct. The Runners practice Parkour, which is... well... I won't go into any detail, but what the runners call a "skill roll," is not actually a somersault. The Runners, instead of rolling over their head and down their spine, actually roll over their shoulder and across their spine, to distribute the kinetic energy that is accumulated when falling. If they rolled in a somersault, the action would have been wasted, as they would have distributed the energy on their spine.

Sorry if I got too technical.

As a tip, if you plan to write more stories on Mirrors Edge, I suggest that you read up on Parkour. Just Google it.

I just finished Mirror's Edge about 2 hours ago... and I still loathe that wet, spotchy noise Faith makes everytime she falls of a roof. Hate it, Hate it, Hate it! Good story too (can't forget that...)

this was an awesome story, nice job.

I love it... My favorite quote would have to be "People make mistakes. Sucks when you make one as a Runner, but they happen." That repetition just tied your story together for me. Just like one of your other reviewers, I missed that tragedy part and didn't expect the ending at all. But I loved the ending (in a weird way i guess) I just enjoy reading what I don't expect. The details were amazing and I recall 'seeing' that dead runner lying there with blood dribbling out of his mouth... (ew .

great details! very nicely written. while i can't say i like the idea of faith being killed (haha) this was a good fic. i hope you write for mirrors edge again soon [:

I liked that! Admittedly, I wasn't expecting her to actually die, though I should of, but I missed the "tragedy" genre up at the top. My bad. But I agree; in my many times of dying by gun shots and falling off roofs (as well as screwing up distances) I also thought of different ways to write out a dramatic death scene. Though isn't it kind of fun when you fall off a roof and look up as you fall? The sound and feeling the game gave was the perfect "oh crap."

But yes, I liked how you wrote it all out, it came out well. I could easily picture Faith's movements and routes in my head and that feeling of "what if" you gave in the fic was great too. Gotta love "what if"s. I also really liked that association you made with freedom and refusing to put her hair in a bun or pony tail.

Good job!

Hedwig

I liked it. It was very articulate, but try for some more syntactic diversity (i.e. different sentence structure). Occasionally it seemed that you leaned towards one too much and it disturbed the flow slightly. Otherwise, I thought you captured her instinctual thinking very well. Everything seemed very spontaneous, perfect for the plot.

You didn't think you could escape me, did you? :P

I don't want to explain how I know about Mirror's Edge, but I will say this: Ahh-mazing. I can easily recognize your writing, it has a certain quality that I just...recognize. Anyways, there was one thing I'm pretty sure was not a typo, it was just you thinking that's how it was spelled. And seeing as you're writing stories for Mirror's Edge, you should know that it's "Somersault", not "Summersault". See, the spell checker even said so as I was typing this. So overall, mucho excellent.

The lover of cheezburgers,

cheezburgerlover

PS: Wouldn't the portal gun come in handy in this game? :P