The story is interesting so far. First person narration can also be hard to write. I almost always use third person narration because first person can be difficult. I have joined recently, and have little writing experience. However, I have a point of constructive criticism.

I agree with the previous reviewer. You could have some more variety with verbs. "Said" is very helpful for dialogue, but it does not have to be used that often.

Wow, an awful lot better then your previous stories. One niggle though, instead of saying 'Kristy said', 'I said', 'Jessi said', 'Claudia said', use different verbs. For example; 'Kristy grinned', 'I muttered,', 'Jessi squealed', 'Claudia noticed.' It doesn't even need to be a verb of speech, like the Kristy and Claudia examples. It's just a small thing, though, to make the story more interesting. What you've given at the moment is the skeleton of the story; flesh it out with description, and it'll be exellent.

You are most definately getting there; don't give up now. MUCH MUCH BETTER! Yay!

Lil