I think this is a great. Fanfiction and also I think amir's should of kick asst ass

Well I like it!

The story was very good. Maybe a few little wording changes. Nothing else though.

Uh, the story is alright and all, but how was Assef even allowed to get into the US after 9/11? He was a high-ranking Taliban member, he'd be arrested or shot on sight.

WOW ! this was amazing :) I really loved it. well done

i like it, but being that it is for school i will tell you this, you spelled past wrong. you kept writing pass. so i would fix that before you turn it in...