this is amazing! it really shows how people aren't meant to try to hurt one another. i like how you can really see her growing lack of interest.

Wow- many things to comment on. Firstly: I love the flow that you have given this. Your writing is in man yways so sureal and nebulous (but in a very good way) and for some reason it reminds me of Hemmingway's style(late period).

Secondly: I appreciate all the effort that you have put into this ,and it is a shame when you don't see enough reviews for a job well done.

Thirdly: I hope that you continue this- no matter how many reviews. I'll always be ther- LOL. ;D

Great job and I can't wait for yoiur next update!

Keep up the good work!