I first read this story on Magik's Fan Fiction page, along with several of your other stories. I think that this story is one of the best of the ones that I've read. Hopefully, I'll get time to read some more of your work.
Sequal wanted! That was good, and not too violent (OK so I'm weird!) You did good descriptions. I always wondered if Betsy ever "got revenge" not that I ever saw/read the story where he attacked her...at least I don't think I did!