 Baby Kat Snophlake 1/2/09 . chapter 1o, I really liked it!
There was a second person I was reading it to, and she really liked it as well. We both agreed that you did a good job keeping them in character. Great job!
I do want to mention though, don't be afraid to use the word "said." You could've gotten away with it a couple times in this short little ficlet, and it wouldn't have been so awkward to see the other verbs in there, like groaned, sighed, wondered, those kinds of things.
Other than that, you are doing well. * favorites *
Kat |