You have a wonderful way with words and emotions. I especially loved how you caught what is beautiful in a relationship with someone so close (even if that means an incestuous relationship): the deep bond of memory and shared moments and understanding in which few others are privy. This is particularly true since they now feel trapped in a world that is no longer really their home; trapped in bodies that are younger than they are 'supposed' to be. All they have left of Narnia is each other.

This idea is embodied in the line: "she could have no lover more caring, no lover more knowing, no lover who could know how hard to pull her hair or how strong her body really is despite its thin wrists, ankles, waist." Beautiful.

Oh, and one more thing, being a lit. major, I really appreciate the quotes at the beginning. (Having studied and loved Shakespeare more than any other writer, made me especially happy to see a quote from Macbeth.)

That was quite sweet. Though, may I point out - I think you may have meant chloroform, not chlorophyll, as chlorophyll's the pigment in plants. :p

oh my gosh, amazing. So intense and passionate. I hope you plan on writing more because this was down right epic!

Like the other reviewers, the way you wrote this was superb. From the very first line was I hooked! There are many beautiful lines in the story, and also some very nice moments. Such as when Susan is hit on/attacked by those boys, and Peter feels the urge to go after them. Very in character for Peter's character.

Brilliant story, and I hope you write more Peter/Susan. We need more high quality stories about them!

Aww...that was so sweet... i love you technique in writing!

ok, i know the whole brother/sister thing is a little disturbing i have to admit but its just a story after all. now, your story has alot of emotion and feeling to it. like a bitter/sweet turmoil within both pevensies, good job.