Wow. What a great chapter; what can I say, Salysha? You were dishing out the hotness on steaming platters. Well written to boot, ridiclously hot but undertoned with a emotional edge that never made it too focused on physicality.

I was giggling at all your words for gentials. Seriously, you seem to have quite a collection! "Precious Crown" did make me guffar, but it worked well in its context. XD

Their light hearted escapades are great to observe, create good levity and a break from the darker chapters we've seen. Their banter and playfulness is once again, natural and easy without being sacchrine or mawkish.

Oh damn.

It was hot. Really, really smokin'. Why are I bothering to be so literate? :D The scene in the words was so funny, and the bike bit...well, if my cheeks got any reader, they would have caught fire.
You did bring us back down to earth with a bump with that cursed cliffhanger, Salysha!
Still, happy new year and I hope your christmas was pleasant. I do plan to read that fic you suggested; I just have to get a few exams out of the way first.
Brill job! Flowing, engaging, and concise, poignant characterisation. You have me rooting for these two.
Red

-readin' AFF version as always-

“I woke up, and you weren’t there...” - DAW, HWO! DAW! X3

I'm surprised at how worried Hwo is about having hurt Jin. I don't see this often in the other Hwojin fics so thanks for that XD

Dark profile carved an elegant portrait on the mirror. - X3

Hwoarang was...? Hwoarang hadn’t...? Hwoarang!? - I'm in the same state as Hwo atm. I CAN HAS CLARIFICATION? D: With guy or at all?! Who the hell wouldn't have tapped that man already!?!?!?!? D: XD

...rise and snuggle up to Jin’s ass. - Because its so warm and comfy and cozy. XD

I've just noticed, so many Hwojin fics have a shower scene... o.o

“Take as long as you like. I’ll be watching.” - NICE!

OH NOEZ they're fighting next D:

Great work as always.

LOVED IT!

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“I’m sorry. It’s a reaction,” he whispered in Jin’s ear. <-- Right there had to be my fave line through the whole chapter!

The shower seen was sexy and hot, and I couldn't stop reading it. I had to read twice cus it jsut was soo omg!

The whole chapter just gave off good chill and had tons of sexy moments, then you end it with the two learning they have to fight one another. That must put a damper on things. I wonder what will happen.

All and All It as a great chapter.

Looking forward to another chapter!

Man its been awhile! Glad to see you still doing a good job. I read this chapter and could only imagine what you wrote on AFF lol. Well good luck and keep up the good work! Im here for you! ^.*

The erotic moments you write in your works fascinate me too much, not only because they're so good but they keep you wanting for more.

The chapter was wonderful and well written, as always.

I love your Jin and Hwoarang :)!!

I missed your updates, too.

All right, the fact that you made their sex somewhat AWKWARD makes me smile. It creates a more realistic atmosphere.

The ending was bittersweet. I feel bad for Jin though I am not quite sure why...

I cannot wait to read more!

My firefox is being so fricken screwy, I can't open the R&R box from firefox and everything it centre aligned T.T I read the AFF version btw, cos I'm like that -shifty eyes- bwahahahaha.

"You can’t change my mind... no matter how much you argue,” - made me giggle so much XD

He hoped Jin mistook his vagueness for a need to piss and took off. - You dunno how much I loved this XD People don't piss enough in stories -glare-

Sad!Hwo was really saddening :( But this made me giggle again: As expected, Hwoarang sprung to life instantly. “Hand ‘em over, Kazama!” he sputtered. - XD

Then, realization hit: Jin had given him a packet of condoms. - -more giggles- Oh Jin XD

'...nd started a slow and painstaking torture on Jin’s mouth.' - is really X3

"Wait!" / “Could... could we do it face to face?” - X3 X3 X3 Your Jin is so epic man.

Loved it. Update again. X3

OMG! OMG! OMG! You finally updated this fic. About time too,I was gonna ask you but- didn't want to get your dark side unleash. Freaken awesome from start to finish. Damn that sweet ass Hwoarang- he just just...fell asleep. Why didn't you make Jin punch him? -kidding aside-

I loved this chapter. There was so much emotion and it felt heartwarming!

The emtion Hwoarng felt in the beginning and the small moment in the woods he shared with Jin next to the tree, was great. That was my faveret part of the chapter.

All in all the chapter was great, and I loved it all!

Cant wait for the next update!

I was eating an apple while reading this. Thoughout said fic, said laptop screen was splattered by said apple as said Red guffawed, *squueed* and gasped thoughout said masterpiece.

What a perfect blend of awkward-emotive-budding hotness! Their interaction was brillantly told; subtle, fluid and bittersweet, never tettering on the edge of being too gsoh or sickly. Their meal and bikeride was great to observe as their first outing as a real couple. You convey their budding love story naturally and damn sweetly, Salysha.

The sex scene was my favourite (and not for the reasons you may be thinking ;D) because it wasn't slow, erotic love making but lustful, slightly awkward, experimental sex lined with real emotion. The little "cover ups" they did were such fun; trying to restrain the attraction betwen them in public.

They also talked to each other in the sex scene, asking what positions they needed to take and what was more comfortable, much more realistic and caring. The ending was discomforting in a vague sort of way; prehaps due to your ambigious take on Jin's feelings, which left the fic on a more profound, thoughtful note that appealled to me.

Great writing, Salysha. Their communication is fabalous to read and your development is precise, thoughtful and well constructed.
Keep Writing!
Red

oh that hurt him. por Hwoarang.
First of all I loved them together Hwoarang and Jin. How sweet and romantic they are. So sweet.
and then Baek returning and probably leaving Hwoarang confused as hell. It's great written. Finally the last part with Hwoarang being hurt and probably confused. argh! this is awesome, you really understand how to write a wonderful story.
Keep up! and update soon! I want to know what happens next? ;) small hints in my direction? pretty please?
- huggs - Amarant Rose Coral.

Uh! Salysha Salysha Salysha! why did you hide this jewel from me? God it was fantastic and hot. and awesome! Lei is no challenge compared to Hwoarang we both know that.;).
Awesome hot scene! Simply adored it. You're still writing fantastic!. I'll continue reading the next chapter. I just thought this chapter deserved credit and DROOL! ;).
Fantastic job my friend.

*throws Salysha some sunblock*
Truly dear, you are desperately going to need this. It is burning over here in Italy.
Apologies for the lateness. Vacations do tend to postpone the loyalty of faithful readers, but not destroy them.

I love reading your interaction between the characters, so natural, full of human clarity which makes my gut hurt. You've got a great balance of likable humor,grounded drama and sexual intensity between the two men, but your best bet is the tangible understanding which seems to coil between them. You've captured that so well, and it is there, quietly burning in the background, giving a real edge to their scenes together.

The Baek Do San scene was suitably emotionally charged, and made painful reading in the case of Hwoarang's evident grief. You detailed his emotions very well.

You move from humor to drama to tragedy with a fluid, effortless flourish which always makes reading your stories a real pleasure, as they are never stuck in a rut, so to speak. You're crafting a real beauty here, Salysha-I care deeply for the characters and their developing relationship.
Keep writing!
Red
PS-Sorry about the spelling mistakes, as I am sure they shall attract your worthy eye-I'm feeling a tad sloppy, but I hope this review shall earn your much yearned for forgiveness. XD

Aw Aw Aw! This even hurt my feelings! Im finally back, whoot! and feeling better than ever! ...until I read your update. Now Im all anxious to find out what happens. Is Baek ok, better yet, is Hwoarang ok? You'll tell us right?

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