Of all people to come get when she was 'sick'... I feel kind of bad for Gin. Even more so for Karin, she made the choose to marry some random guy, I could never do that even if I had to for money or stauas (sp) I kind if surprized everyone hasn't seen through her 'flu'. I would have.. she sounds dead, and sick. Someone had to have put the pieces toghter by now!?! Or they all clueless?!?!

Sorry about the spelling, I really can't spell!

please update!!

This is really quite good. It has good balance between descriptions/explanations and stuff that the reader should know beforehand, as in the basics of the anime itself. Of course, in a non-fan fiction work, you can't do the latter. Again, those characters most important were well described, their traits and actions defined enough to give us a picture of what they look like. It would still have been nice to get at least a little description of Rangiku. Your Rankigu may be quite different from those of other writers, so defining all characters, even if people already know what they look like, can give you a writing style that stands out more.

The mix of hesitance and desire in Karin's emotions was gripping. It would have been cool if the culture was a bit more explained, rather than it simply being stated as an arranged marriage. As Shinigami, there could very well be more social customs and such, which could bring even greater deoth to your story. The military bit in the husband was a nice touch, on that note. Anyways, nicely done, and keep on writing!

-Evanlicious

Olive! :]

Anyways to the story, your writing style has improved A LOT compared to your other stories. Syntax is excellent, voice is strong. I like it! Keep it up love :p

So far it's good.