Good.

The first paragraph of this was really good; I liked it.

Good drama use in the part where he talks about how he was always too late.

Wow. The ending of this was dramatic. It gave me something to think about, that's for sure. :)

That was a pretty good story. :) If I were you, I might describe what she's feeling in more depth in the last paragraph, even though she is hiding it from her master.

Also, in the beginning, you may want to put Ahsoka's name instead of she. However, some authors do write like that.

The story part was a bit confusing, esp. in the early parts of it. If there was a bit of clarification, it would be better. (At least in my opinion.)

Holy crap was this ever intense! I just loved the metaphors the unspoken sense of foreboding and that mix of desperation. You really get this feeling that Anakin is drowning and that for a moment only Ahsoka is allowed to pull him out.

I loved too how innocent her tale was and yet the powerful effect it had on the both of them. How in the end it brought them to an understanding neither can openly speak about or perhaps even fully comprehend.

Great chapter! This was rather different from the first chapter but still good. Thanks for writing this. God bless!

w00t, it's up!

I just wanted to say that you're an awesome writer, and that I really enjoyed doing this collab with you. More to come soon, methinks ...?

"(And all the rest bleed, even though the surrealist thing, the only one I could latch on to with any sort of sanity that day, was how clean everything would be afterward-)" MUST just reiterate for the 10th time how awesome that line is :D YOU GO, SKYWALKER05!

Your very honoured fellow writer (ooh, just typing it honours me!)

-M

Interesting little story, of Anakin's doubts about his place in the Jedi Order, the galaxy, the prophecy. I like how Ahsoka tries to deal with his doubts, to not judge him, to support his thinking. Good job!

I really liked this story. It really added more to Ashoka's character.

Great story! I like how it ended, with Ahsoka asking Anakin what his excuse was. Thanks for writing this. God bless!

Genius! A very clever twist, I must say. ;)

I really loved that, you captured in a single chapter what few manage to do in entire novels. I'm not too good with long responses but I must say that was incredible.

Oh my god, I love this.

You really get into Ahsoka's head at this point - and I love your explanation as to how she got the headdress, because if she's meant to be around 13-14 in the CW series - we don't know for sure yet, I don't think? - there's no way she could have killed an akul. She'd have had to be like what, ten? :D

“So, that’s my excuse.” She smiled, tried to make it cute, but was sure that she simply ended up looking like she was just staring into the distance (because she was). “What’s yours?” That is possibly the best ending to a oneshot that I have seen in a LONG time! Aah, rhetorical questions ...

I also liked her insecurity as to how to measure herself. It's really ironic that she's asking Anakin, who's like the most insecure/arrogant guy in the entire Order ... nrgh, I DEMANDS SEQUEL.

PLEASE can you do a sequel of sorts? I really want to see Anakin's reaction to the question ... and his answer ;D

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Mathematica

aww, that was a cool story, yeah, nice lesson to be learned, that Jedi are not measured by their achievements, but sometimes by their kind deeds. :)