What an enjoyable piece of work. You kept Shunsui and Nanao strictly in character, and you made their actions seem believable and realistic. I can easily see Nanao being reserved about Shunsui's efforts while he attempts to impress her.

The general ambiance of the fic was done well, too. The entire thing felt graceful, natural in all aspects. And it's quite obvious that you're well versed with the Setsubun culture as well, seeing as how well it was woven into the story.

And most of all, I think you snagged the air of simple, effortless romance perfectly. You made Shunsui and Nanao seem so natural, so perfect. And the added touch of daffodils didn't hurt either.

I do think you should give the fic another once over, though: there are a few instances where commas should really be semi-colons, and other instances were commas should probably be placed to better the flow of the narrative.

But otherwise, a very well written piece, Ms. Western Ink. Favorited. :3

~Koky

AW! this was so touching, great work!!

Ooh! I like it so far. I Olio from another one of your fics? I remember reading about that cat.

I am happy to see the daffodil play out so nicely with your random choice and its actual meaning!

You posted this so fast, my comments on all the chapters came after the story was already done!

This is a very cute story and what I like most about it is that the traditional aspect of Setsuban. You incorporated the trip to the temple on top of the throwing of beans within the houses, and I really enjoyed the mixture between both. The temple scene was intriguing and made me think about the true meaning behind the celebration even more. I had never researched Setsuban or anything so it was completely new for me.

I really really loved it...and one of the scenes was quite suggestive (blush)!I hope we'll see some more fics for the contest but yours was incredible...good job^__^

It was great. Awesome Job. I loved it. Thanks for posting.

It is ridiculously appropriate. Although it's not really ridiculous, just neat. That was quite the original idea really. Edible paint of his own design? Perfect. It's so sad not seeing many fics listed for this challenge. That reminds me that I need to get on that sometime tonight or tomorrow morning. Cute fic though. I really liked it. Until next time. -KG

I really like this one...you set a good pace and kept the characters in character...good luck in the contest.