Love it =]

While I like the concept, I don't think this was written particularly well. Spelling and grammar errors aside, there are really bad jumps in the tense of the piece, from first to third person and back again, which makes it seem at times that there are three people present rather than (I think) two. Also, BG? Her name is DG, not BG. And, frankly, I don't think it's actually written very sexily either, and I LOVE this pairing so it makes me sad to have to say that.
Tighten up your writing, get a Beta reader, etc. It wasn't great, in the very least.
Sorry :(

oh man... that was not nice from you! i had to google the two because i didn't know who they are.. then you're starting totally HOT and thahan? mäh... cruel i tell you.. thats cruel XD but i like it o.O ah well.. masochism XD go on, go on ... pleease? i love that challenge XD