Personally, even though this is six months later, I think you should continue. This is cute, and intruiging. Good luck :)

This is what I like about L. Logical to a fault and sometimes even downright cold though he never means for it to be like that. I like that hard, realistic thinking.

Just thought to leave a word here. I know how much reviews mean to authors. It took me some time to get around to reading this but I enjoyed it all the same.

I think this will turn out really good if you continue it. its a great start and i really want to know what happens. so please finish it. the fate of my little world rests on finding out what happens! bye!

aww, that's cute. haha, i love how L talks in such a matter of fact voice.

wow sounds interesting. can't wait to see where this goes

Continue!

Interesting one... I'm in a rush so i can't say more than that.

~Jao

Well, this sounds interesting. The whole hostage-bonding thing actually makes sense too. Update soon! =D

**, i do hope the girl isn't light. people who like that just wawnt to see him uke. stupid peoples...

not quite sure, but the first chapter is promising, so you should continue! it seems pretty short though, and L seems so, unsure, unlike canon, but hey, where's lighto? is he the girl?! if so, heheheehehehehe, you couldtwist thisinto somany different paths!can't wait, update soon!

I don't usually like OCs that much, but for some reason, I've taken a liking to this one. Even though she's sweet and quite friendly, I don't get the vibe that she's just a regular Mary-Sue. There's something different about her. I think there's a lot more than what meets the eye with Aiku girl. I'm eager to learn more about her and the circumstances surrounding her capture.

I've never read a Death Note fic like this, so I have no idea what to expect. I like that, because I like surprises. :D

I love this. ^_^

well, this story is turning out interesting. though i will admit i thought the friend L was going to make in his prison cell would be raito. that'd be more believable and interesting. regardless, interesting start.

You should definitely continue this.

If I might make a suggestion, make each chapter a full day.

Always,
Robert Mason