This was very well written, and not just circling around the love making like most M-rated things are. I liked it a lot. ^^ Please continue writing your stories! ^^

its so cute! i love gabriel and vivian! its adorable and wonderfully written. way to go!
~Bri

Too bad they didn't add something like this in the book. It was good, I like it.

You do write much like her and thats not something people can easilly do. I think you got the characters down about their personalities, but I think it was missing something. I can't put my finger on what, but I think it needs more intensity, but other than that, its simply wonderful and sounds like it came right from the book itself. Good work!

I like it that should have been the ending definatley! ^_^

Love it! When I read the book I knew that something like this would happen after words and I bow down to you for putting it into words... it's suggested but I think we need to read it!
Your style is really similar to Anette Curtis Klausse's which makes the piece both believeable to read and to picture as an epilogue in the book.
Great piece!
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Very good story. It was very close to the books format. I am glad that you did your story about Blood and Chocolate I loved the book hated the movie. I believe more people should do stories about Blood and Chocolate

This was very good!

That is so great!! I am dying to write some B&C fanfics, but I'm so busy right now writing other things. I need to step outside my twilight box!!

Aww. That was really good. Awesome.