That was nice how you used silver and gold to symbolize Near and Mello ( that was them right?). That part when Near was sad Mello had left was a nice touch:)

Awesome! I could understand What happened. SO SAD! T.T

Nice... I thought at first the Silver One was L (YAY L! Yes I am a fangirl), but then I realized it was Near...

I don't think gold tarnishes, by the way. "the locality filled with toys" rather gave it away... Somewhat destroyed the air of "ancient legend" mystery. Otherwise, very good.