Oh, I liked that. Hope you're going to write more pre-book fanfics, there aren't enough out there and your work is excellent :)

i love this story! i'm done... ok, yeah, some minor typos, nothing to worry about... good dialogue... really good story by the way... yeah... i'm really done this time... ^__^

That was nice. The only discrepancy I could find was Murphy not being a bit more irritated with Harry. Tolerance doesn't seem to be high on her list when murder's involved.

Hahaha! Great Harry Murphy fic! Any chance that you'd continue this? I think this would make a great little pre-storm front fic. Keep up the good work!

Very sweet! Loved the interaction with sleepy!Dresden. So cute!

So what happens next? You tweak our curiosity with the strange symbols and stuff, then bail just as we're about to get into the proper action.

As a nice little vignette of "why Murphy ever called Dresden" this is nice, but it begs to be continued.

very well written, the narrating of this story matches its big brother
if some place id read about butcher releasing a dresden files kinda how-it-all-began book presenting this as an excerpt i would believe it - almost

one thing that bothers me about the text is not related with the writing itself but murphy's character
in the first few books before she and harry become close friends she regards him as a tool; she neither likes nor dislikes him, but he gets the job done which is why she uses him
so, after being so bloody frustrated about the murders and not knowing him at all she seems to be very lighthearted all of a sudden when he makes his few jokes
too many smiles and giggles etc for a frustrated and ** of murphy (who doesnt even know harry yet)

the laughs would have been ok if you had brought in a kind of feeling conveying the impression that murphy is so stressed out and desperate that the mere fact that she resorts to calling some possible lunatic seems funny to her in some way

so anyway, thats out of character for murphy; i know thats quite a bit of criticism on some laughing there but i figure its more important to point out the bad things rather then the good ones :)

one more thing: that meeting harry under a bridge cleaving a troll in two thing was really nice

maybe you could bring that back if you continue with the story, it would certainly have a dresden-feeling to it if he suddenly shows up chopping something to pieces

nice. I like the idea of Dresden's first case w/ the SI.

I like pre-book canon stories. It's just a pity that not many people write them. Good job. I'm looking forward to reading more.