Good chapter since Katie is interested in Graphics while Piros be a main character?

If writing this chapter took work then that means you probably thought about things like word variety and story flow which should payoff.

Hey! It's been a while. I see you redid your story here. This is kind of weird but if I remember right, I kind of liked your other version better. This had a lot of tl;dr moments that I just kind of skipped over, mostly descriptions and explainations. It might be easier on the eyes if you seperated the paragraphs more because they are enormous. Geez, it's really weird to say this but I think your describing a little too much. That was something that I remembered from the previous version. All the character descriptions were very, very long even though they were canon characters. It's great and all but the massive blocks of words make me descouraged before I even start reading it. I'm not saying it's bad or anything because it's not. It's just very overwhelming. If it wasn't for the fact that I already knew the story and knew I liked what was going on in it, I'm not sure if I would have read it all.

I'm not saying this because I want to discourage you because I don't. I like this story and I really want to see you continue it. I also want to see you get more reviews. ;) If you don't take my advice, I don't care. It's your story and I don't want to control it by any means. I just wanted to give you my opinion. Who knows? I might just be some loser that doesn't know what she's talking about...oh wait, I am! XD Haha.

Please keep updating. I loved the last version and I really hope you don't discontinue it. I hope I wasn't too harsh. ^_^

-autumnmycat23

Great story write more soon please.

O, I like how you made Ryoko go berserk. Nice twist. I love how you work in all the characters. :3 A little more spelling mistakes in this one but still, grammar's good.

Yes, Kite wears red. There are orange symbols on his outfit though. He is sometimes referred in dot hack media as "the boy in red" since apparently the shade of red he wears can't be chosen in the player customization screens.

Great New Chapter

Great Story

Since you're rewriting this part, keep in mind that Kite's outfit is red, not orange.

You brought Ovan into this. =D I love him so much. But, I still really like this story. Keep updating.

Wow... I love the ways that you've described the canons and how they interact with each other. It's quite difficult to do that, but you've pulled it off! I'll be sure to put this on my constant-read list!

Wow, you updated FAST!
How did you!
You have Supernatural powers!
Argh!

Yes! I can't wait for the next chapter. =D
I love this. I lol'd so hard when they started catfighting. =3
Keep it up!

=D
Yay! Kuhnie! Haha
No, but this just keeps getting better. I don't know why I like OC stories in .hack// so much. Maybe I just like seeing Kuhn hit on girls. >=)
Just keep updating. I would hate to see this story be dropped.

Cool. =3
This sounds like it's going to be good.

Well, It's a really good start.
You should keep up doing them!
It's good that Katie/Raven Does have a good personality!

PD: Few! Good that Katie didn't choose a beast as her race for her character.

PD of the PD: We! No mispelling! 10/10