It feels like as if it's a part of a story and not a one shot alone. I think you could possibly write a whole story revolving around the two. Though there were many grammatical mistakes, the story held attention and made you feel like reading more. Plus, in the end, you are left wondering why Sam was so reluctant and why did he do it with Jacqui. Like I said, you could write a very effective novel involving the two. Good luck

Love it!!

It's a cute story. I think it would have worked better if was a longer story. It seems a bit rushed. Otherwise I liked it.

Awesome! There were a few grammatical errors but it was still a great story.
Mary Anne and Cary made me love it even more :)