This truly the stuff that is missing TP's book. Very nicely done, the first five chapters.

"Clearly he was having trouble thinking of a seven foot skeleton with a scythe as the answer to all his problems."

Hahahaha!

Oh, and so Lily is slowing acquiring Deathness via apples and honey? Clever!

Hurray, you've written returned to writing Discfics! Wonderful opening sentence, and the toys in the bag, yes, gotta have those toys.

"In fact it all seemed quite natural - in a supernatural sort of way." Perfect!

Looking forward to more. There will be more, yes? Yes?

Very good story you've got here, well written. You're inserting a new character into an existing story, though - you'll need to be very careful to make sure she doesn't turn into a Mary Sue. You seem to be doing well so far, though - keep it up!

"a seven foot tall skeleton in a quick frozen black robe might be a rather alarming sight to somebody who didn’t know him well." Indeed, LOL.

I liked the tour of Death's Domain and the idea that Lily writes letters to her dead parents. I wonder - is it really them that write back? I wouldn't put it past Death to fake such letters.

Niggles:
"Lily was afraid she about" - missing "was"
“We’ll go back.” Lily decided. COMMA AFTER "back" !

I liked the creak of underused muscles when Albert smiled. Pseudoanonymous Street is an excellent street name!

It is a charming tale. My only point of contention is this: We should either see Lily show some sadness over the loss of her parents, or be given a reason why she doesn't.

So-o-o, this is going to be continued? Seems like it could stand alone as a fill-in-the-missing-moment, but from your summary it would appear we have reason to hope for more, yay. :D

Lily is sweet, although I, like Albert, kind of wonder about Death's ability to learn from his mistakes. It seems unhealthily nonexistent, all things considered.