Oh my goodness! This is so sad! *whimpers* Poor Sev! Although I like the progression from him being desperate for her to love him back to eventually just wishing that she were alive. It's like a gradual acceptance. Well done.

I definitely have to subscribe you so that I don't miss these small jewels of yours. (-: Yeah, I can really see him wishing "less and less" this way - after all, he can live without her, though he is definitely not happy about that, but had she lived, he would have been able to move on, I think. Like this, he always has to wish that James and she lived - just because that would mean she was simply and wonderfully alive.

One minor correction, though: the characters should be Severus S. and Lily Evans P. (Lily Luna is Harry's daughter, if I am not mistaken).

I like the way you use the Mirror of Erised and what Snape sees in it to tell the story. However,I think you forgot that Lily Luna P. is actually Harry Potter's daughter.

I think Snape really does see Lily in the Mirror of Erised.

That was so full of emotion, and made me feel so sorry for Severus. It was beautiful.

interesting insight!

Dear Emily:

Given how useful a literary device the Mirror of Erised is, I'm a little surprised more people don't use it this way. Still, if it's a choice between one exquisitely worked jewel of a story and a hundred mediocre ones, I'll take this any day.

The one thing I might quarrel with is the use of speech in the mirror scenes. I was under the impression that the Mirror of Erised didn't have an audio capacity - and, to be perfectly frank, I think giving it one diminishes it. It would be much more effective if the last three scenes, like the first one, were completely silent; the dialogue (particularly in #3) diminishes their poignancy.

Apart from that, though, it's a glorious piece of work. My compliments.

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

This was beautiful.

Heartbreaking, yes, but so beautiful. I love your description of Severus' increasing desperation to hold on to any part of Lily until there is nothing left.

Wonderful story.

This is so sweet and sad! I totally ship this pairing, adding to favs!

That was...sad. And really selfless.

well written, i teared up.
I like how Severus' feelings change throughout

One word: Beautiful.

I can't seem to stop crying when I read this pair...

oh, now that was really well-written. i love that, the gradual desperate lowering of what he needs as reality begins to taint his hopes. i like the repetition; it drives the point home so well. it's the same scene over and over again, a singular loop returning to the beginning, and every time changing as he loses more. great story.

that was amazing! i was thinking of writing about what Snape would've saw in the Mirror, and i went on ffnet...sure enough...your story. it was brilliant. :)

Wow. Very moving.