|Reviews for The Victim|
| singular-motion 8/19/12 . chapter 1
Beautiful...and Eden by the way, was an absolute masterpiece. One of the best pieces of fiction that I have ever read. Well done!
| raspberryjukebox 6/15/12 . chapter 1
brilliant. i'd love to see this continued.
| Garling 7/20/11 . chapter 1
My god I love your stories! I have just finished Eden and I loved it! You are one of the few authors that I have read that manage to keep the HP characters in...character! Please write more, your stories are so addictive:D
| roon0 6/15/11 . chapter 1
I loved the insight in to Lucius messed up mind.
| Shortscribbling 12/16/10 . chapter 1
I do love this :)
It's really well written and it is fascinating to look at things from Lucius' point of view. I would love to see another of these set in the last couple of chapters.
Thank you very much for sharing this :)
| GGhanima 8/4/09 . chapter 1
| David boreanaz's wife247 4/12/09 . chapter 1
anger managment my dear darling death eater
| mystarius 1/6/09 . chapter 1
Yummy... I enjoyed that little delve into Lucius' thoughts - before the eventual undoing of his entire being by an 'insignificant' Mudblood girl. He contradicts himself in almost every other sentence which is, undeniably a testament to how irrevocably she has gotten inside of his soul. He just isn't aware of it yet. I love how you use Hermione's eyes as the one feature which deeply disturbs Lucius. It runs parallel to Hermione's descriptions of his eyes throughout Eden. However, it is the humanity in her eyes he cannot stand, and conversely, she is appalled by the vacuity in his. Thank you for your marvellous story-telling, it has inspired passion within me once again. May you have a life long journey with your writing and continue to expand on your incredible potential as a professional author. Watch out Stephenie Meyer!
| Marble Meadow 12/31/08 . chapter 1
This brainstorm of yours is really interesting. I love seeing things from other character's perspectives... and this is simply stunning. All alone, this could be a one shot... I really think it is a brilliant piece of work.
| crysta656 12/31/08 . chapter 1
Please please please get the next chapter of Eden up before a month! :) It was nice of you to post this oneshot. I've been wanting to know what he was thinking when she was looking at him. It was good to hear his pov! Great job and keep up the AWESOME work!
| Puerta 12/31/08 . chapter 1
Although I know that this is not only a written exercise, I really love how we are allowed a tiny peek into the mind of the ever contradictory Lucius Malfoy...
This is brilliant. If I were granted my greatest wish, it would be for you to write a companion story to Eden in Lucius's POV... but that would be ridiculous, amazing, but ridiculous...
As I read Eden, I felt I was able to read with almost certainty his emotions about 80% of the time. the other 20% it was hard to tell... but even with this small taste, I feel I understand him better as a character. His motives, thoughts and feelings about the girl who is ruining his life...
I love this... and i love you for writing my favorite fanfiction EVER. :D
| blameless nameless 12/31/08 . chapter 1
Goodness, this was mesmerising! I loved hearing Lucius' thoughts that plainly show how contradictory he's being with himself. Makes me wonder how volatile human emotions are, and how unexpected changes can be. I suppose for Lucius, it's similar...
Thank you for sharing this enjoyable little snippet! It really was an insight into Lucius' mind. :)
| Anna 12/31/08 . chapter 1
Thank you so much for sharing this! I suggested a while ago that this would be fantastic, and as usual, you did not disappoint me. I loved it.
| telperien 12/31/08 . chapter 1
Perfect sense. Somehow your writing is so good that I already sensed all of Lucius feelings in Eden, without them being spelled out. But this companion piece makes them even more clear.
More Lucius to the people! he is such a wonderful character I do wish there was a way of having a whole movie with him.
| Rosetta Penn 12/30/08 . chapter 1
ah! yes! omg i've been waiting for you to write a companion piece for Eden from Lucius's pov for ever! Even if it's not a "real" part of the story, still, thankyouthankyouthankyou!
This is so good. I mean I'm very very glad that Hermione and Lucius are in love and running away together, I was thirilled with the las Eden chapter, but I remember the most INTENSE part of the story was when they both hated each other (and maybe something more). That was when I'd check my email a bazillion times a day to see if you updated, that was what got me hooked. So it's so good to flashback to that time.
I love Lucius' over analysis of her, like he assumes she knows what she's doing to him, but also knows she can't. How he knows he's thought of her in *that* way, but denies it even to himself, of course. The comparison of her fear of him to "flat champagne"- it's beautiful. There's so much conflict here, I just love it.
Oh, and of course, the last line,
"But if she turns those infernal eyes of hers on me one more time, I’ll tear them out of her head with my bare hands."
love it love it. I wasn't sure weather to laugh or just...idk, squeel, lol.