 I <3 JD 2009-07-24 . chapter 3 Hey! Sorry I haven't reviewed in forever; I've been on vacation and I just got home yesterday.
I'm glad Noel got what she deserved! I hope Miranda can do something with her. I really liked Heather in this chapter and was impressed by her 180 degree change. Is there going to be a chapter with the sleep over? If so, Noel better not ruin it!
I can't wait for an update! I don't know anything about Hey Arnold, but I'll still read your stories! :D |
 I <3 JD 2009-06-18 . chapter 2 Gr, I want to hit Noel so bad!! xD If I EVER had a daughter like that, she wouldn't be grounded, she'd be DEAD! At least Heather's not as bad; she's still annoying, but tolerable for the most part. You do a great job making the characters' personalities differ from each other. The bad chacters make me want to shake the monitor and scream, whilst the good characters make me smile and laugh. Not many stories get me going like that! xD
As for the story line, I want to know what's going to happen to Heather and Noel! I hope Miranda lays the smack-down on them! And prom night with Lucas and Natalie sounds like it's going to go well; let's just hope his sisters won't mess it up!
There are some grammar errors, but that could be easily fixed. A beta would be a good idea (which I think every author on here should have), so if you want, you can look for one. Besides that, it's understandable and you get your point across easily. Be careful with the italics as well. I'm not sure if you noticed, but they were still on after the song lyrics and it stayed that way for the majority of the chapter, which made it kind of hard to read. Overall, it's doing great! I can't wait for an update! :D |