I don't think it was suckish, I thought it was really sweet, I hope you write another one like this :)

That was not bad in anyway. Don't get all down on yourself because it was a fluffy little story that'll get all the other girls swooning. That's how fluff works, doncha know? :D
~TaRa

It's not bad, it's actually pretty good. Short one-shots don't really need much of a plotline. I did notice one spelling error, not that I'm the worlds greatest speller.

Her clock was off, acting as a beach towel under her.
should be cloak.

Just trying to be helpful.

A pairing I usually despise, and yet I very much enjoyed it, The plot was slightly empty, but the emotion was spot-on. Well done.

Raven's actions were slightly out of character, but I don't really think it matters. It has some really neat ideas and good structure. There's potential for more, but I kind of like it just the way it is.

And... The vocab was fine, and it wasn't as repetitive as you think. :P In fact, I didn't find it repetitive at all.

Thanks for the New Year's Present. ;)

~B~

raven is so OOC in this story, but still it was very awesome:D