Hello nik/kat!! This is your editor/best friend(I think) talking!! Not bad for your first chapter although I see what you mean about the spelling!! The prologue was surprising!! Keep the insignia for the next chapters!!(Pheonix has a brother?)

Really good..
i REALLY want to know the end of it.. since i already know what's gonna happen next.. but the content and the grammar mistakes are well done.
keep updating and i'm sure you will get a lot of success in it.
Tainted Diamant