WOW.

This was so typical and horrible.

You failed miserable to capture the emotions in this chapter and it came off really dull and horrible.

Plus, this situation has been done before why not try something more original? I would call the copy-cat card but this is a horrible copy that shouldn't even be compared.

I've read a Pan and Vegeta story that was exactly like this. Same situation and everything. Hmm.

I thought it was a pretty good story, myself. Cute, but at the same time serious. I like the Serena/Vegeta pairing, its one of my favorites, and I didn't feel as if the characters were noticabley out of character. I wish you would maybe write a chapter sequel or something telling about the famiy's reaction, or what serena and Vegeta will do, but that's up to you and if you're happy with it I wouldn't change a thing. Hope you will continue to experiment with this pairing.
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