 Anonymous 2009-01-01 . chapter 1 Hmm, this looks like it'll be interesting. I'd like to see what happened to Nudge.
Just one quick nitpick: "I haven’t cried in forever, and yet I found salty tears running down my face."
You're using two tenses there: present (haven't), and past (cried, found).
But anyway, this is a very suspenseful start, and I look forward to seeing how you'll continue the story. :) |