I like this. I like how you categorize the levels of gloom.

This was good. I like how the women all can feel instinctively that the gloom goes deeper. I like how you portray her when she's falling in love and pays for it, and later when she's not so sure about it. I like how, at the end, she puts her own experience to work and foretells what should happen to Svetlana. I don't like hoe choppy this was. It feels like it could have been fleshed out a litle, but I see how you went about it. Good Work!