OK, this is a very good story BUT, you are beginning to piss me off with all of the beating around the bush. I mean just get on with telling how Harry ended up as Harold Parker, will ya? Is her really powerful and been holding back from kicking Hermione's butt? Because I have to tell you, her attitude really sucks! And you spent at least two chapters after he fell unconscious and still haven't told all (you did mention some) that was wrong and or what is going on with his body. He is going through the change. What is it, menopause? I mean really could you be any for unclear?

" I do not like being stared at for something I did when I was one year old. How would you like it if everyone started to stare at you because you used to take a dump in your nappy when you were one year old."

This may be one of my favorite all replies by Harry when asked about defeating Voldie!

And this where I stopped reading your story. It's like look I came back from the dead, doesn't everybody? I can't take this story seriously if you don't.

Three massive jarring and stupid interruptions to the story flow in one super tiny chapter.. This story is rapidly approaching an early end for me.

This needs proofread and the in story author's notes must go. They are distracting and amateurish. If you have any doubt, just go pick up any popular fiction novel off a shelf and I'll bet that you do not find any...

The premise is original and pretty good, but you really need to stop with all the author's notes in the story. They break the story flow and should be avoided entirely. If you need an author's note put it at the beginning or end.

great chapter

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"Last week it took us a month to get this much" Nice trick to do a months work in a week.

Seriously though - great story. I'll keep reading.

HANKY PANKY? I was laughing right away when you wrote that.

Cool chapter

Now not to be irritating but you must know by now that the Gobi desert is not located in India? Yes it is on the asian landmass, but it is in China, which is a fair distance from India.

I really like your story.

ive heard people praise your name and i thought to myself i should read this story, so i did and i have to say im very disappointed your story makes less sense than a down syndrome kid trying to rap

hey, I liked the storie for the most part. I thought that the Harold Parker thing was pretty cool. I wold have expected Harry to be darker... more jaded, after the morraco experience though. I noticed that hyou tend to go into too much detail about the little things, and not enough into the big things, other than that, Good job! BTW, do yo happen to know of any stories where Harry recognizes the importance of potions? I mean, their like frickin portable spells for crying out loud! I would like for the story to be at least 100k if possible but a little less would be fine too. anyway, thanks for any help you can give me and don;'t respond to this PM. send your reply to CosmicCalligrapher @ Hotmail . com

i am at chapter 10 and i cant stand to read any more of it i apologise but i think you need a beta reader before you set your stories out.