You're right, is not that bad, in fact is very interesting. You show the loneliness, sadness and fear, that we, humans have.

You made a story of how do people learn to love and know theirselfs.

Very Good!

Ganbate Kudasai!

Anyways, I usually don't like writing reviews and stuff, but your fic was really really good. It almost made me cry. Please keep on writing more fanfics... Jane

Oh! It's really cuteeeee! But i hate it cause it made me cry! and i loe it cause it's beatiful. And it's not confusing. Hope you continue the good work!