wow, so good

Absolutely delightful! I appreciated the character development in that you didn't make them into totally different people and showed Severus' acceptance as gradual, reluctant or possibly, down right afraid. Harry's characterization as persistent but soft spoken which is definitely in keeping with the original character which is so important yet so often overlooked. All in all, well done.

{snicker} I find it oddly appropriate for a writer who deals with a living, post-DH Severus to have the name AmanitaMuscaria. Nicely chosen. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters on more stories sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm

Oh. My. God. One of the most gentle fic I've ever read. And still very much in character too. I think this fic conveys that weariness both of them would feel after - years after - the war very well. I love this ending much more so than the book ending. lol I really like your style. Do write more please =D

You are a freakin' god! This was so awesome I don't know where to begin, lol. I especially like the characterisation...small things like the way Harry would say "Snape. Severus" LOVE IT!! Keep writing, I'll be looking out for your work ;)

i really enjoyed this story. i like that it is dh complient and i appreciate that you kept snape in charicture. i hope you will consider doing a sequal for this one

wow that was brilliant. i thoroughly enjoyed it

This story embodies what I look for in fanfiction, in oneshots especially. This story has that sense of urgency, of moving forward, and of needing to do it quickly. Yet there is that slow battle to remain the same in fear of change or the unknown.

The emotion in this is so riveting. Every action can be understood, not because it is spelled out, but because the words sweep readers into the characters' minds. Not only can we see them struggling, we can feel them too.

When Harry started to seduce Severus I could taste the apprehension, yet at the same time I felt Harry's emotions too. The thoughts were so tangible I could almost taste them.

Thank you for this wonderful work. It really is a rare gem.


Obsidianwolf97

nice.. sad but getting happier. they both deserve it. i was actually expecting harry to top, just because severus seemed so lost, but it was nice the way you wrote it, because sev might not have been able to handle any more loss of control. definitely write more!!

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Reply to HarrySnape1989 and my general philosophy, I guess.

I would say that a writer strives to write as best as they can, but I would never dismiss constructive criticism, or say that an outside view might not give me some insight.
I would hope we are all trying to improve our mastery of the craft of writing.
Part of this question is also around whether we write for ourselves, or for an audience. I'm suppose that if one writes purely for oneself, one can claim one's writing as the best; the epitome to be reached at a particular time.
I write for myself, but also for other people, and I try to communicate an idea, a feeling, a thought. If I succeed, I need people to tell me I have. Otherwise, I might imagine I have communicated but not have done so.

AM

I liked this...very nice plot and setting. It flowed very well. The only thing I did not like is your comment that review makes your writing better. An author can only make himself write better, his work must always be to the best of his ability before presenting it to the mass. Reviews are for feedback and mild corrections if needed but the text should always be as good as it can before being posted.

OUTSTANDING! You've absolutely impressed me! I feel like a simple "more please! asap!" will not suffice to outline the magnitude of this story, therefore I believe a more proper review is in order:
PLOT: very, very original... & very good also.
ACTION: what can I say I got so caught up last night that my folks had to force me to bed(it was past midnight!)
EMOTION:I refrain from making any comments on this regard of your story for some very SERIOUS reasons:
1)I can't see anymore!
2) my chest hurts!
3) my tension has reached a dangerous point!
[look in what state have you just brought me! lol!]
CHARACTERS: I love them! especially Severus who is beautifully well-written! no need to worry about ooc, this IS a fanfiction after all! lol.


PLUS: you've managed to surprise me so...
all in all, a brilliant idea embodied in a marvelous, well-written story!

well, I suppose you got the main idea: VERY WELL DONE! write sequel SOON!

SINCERELY,
~moon~

oh this was absolutely perfect! i loved it.

That was an awesome story! Keep up the good work!