Wow this was certainly an intersting start to the fic. Its intersting to see read how well you tie chracters together from so many differents series and make it seem like they all belong...(if that made any sense at all)...Its a very interesting read and I look forward to more.

Yes! The chapters in my opinion, are short. But hey *shrugs* that's your decision.

Though people tend to be picky about description, so I would say add a bit more description.

And who's Jay? He seems familiar... but I can't place it. Mind telling me who he is? Or is Jay a she? Aughh... @.@