Great job! I really liked this!

You are a good writer too!

Sarah

Aw! This was so sweet! Linus is a little genius! Aw, Kelsi and Ryan being biffles is so sweet! LoL at Keslsi's reactions!

Fave Lines:
"It’s like a girlfriend but only it’s not a girl but a boy. Everybody knows that!”
This line was too cute for words!

"Linus nodded vehemently. “Yeah, nearly every night!” He scrunched up his nose in a frown and added: “Though they can’t be very good dreams. More like really scary, bad dreams. I can hear the bed squeaking in rhythm like he’s rolling around in his sleep, and he moans and groans all the time. And then he’s waking up gasping and screaming… ‘Oh God! Ryan! ”
OH MY…"
This seriously made me laugh out loud!

LOL at Ryan having to get something for Boi! And aww, I love Ryan's mum! She's so sweet with her lil Ducky <3

Alsi, I really like Luminescent as a clothing store name. And the nickname Lumi's for it is really cool sounding! And aw, Ryan giggling is cute! And I love Chad's fit of jealousy!

"Chad hadn’t loosened his grip on Ryan’s shirt and therefore stumbled in with him. He pressed himself flush against Ryan, body, legs and all, and growled inches away from Ryan’s face:
“Say that again!”
“You’re the…”
Before Ryan had the chance to finish the words Chad’s lips had crashed onto him and then… then Chad’s tongue was suddenly in his mouth and hands roamed over his shoulders and arms and everywhere at once. A moan escaped Ryan’s throat and he threw his arms around Chad, pulled him even closer and kissed back."
THE HOTTEST MAKE OUT IN A FIC EVER!

Also I really like the end with the parents, and with Linus, I love Chad's interactions with his brother! They're the perfect older brother-younger brother relationship~

I must say, this is one of the best fic's ive read in a long time. It was cute and hot and funn and had me grinning like an idiot at my screen. Keep it up. [:

I love this story OMG, I love it.

yay! A cute story about Ryan and Chad finding each other with out starting out that way. This was cute, I liked it a lot. I don't know if the first line makes sense, it's just that when I look for fics about two boys, i like the stories about how they find out htey like each other, not the ones where they're already together, you know?
well, great job!

Ok, this was REALLY good. Total inspiration for the CHOY I’m writing, because I’m more partial to CHOY rather than CHYN/RYOY -- I’m just going to call it R/C.

Anyway this is really good. i think you used a bit to many ...'s but other than that insignificantly minor detail this is the best, by far, HSM man/man fic I’ve ever read.

Which, let me tell you, is definitely saying something. I LOVE Will, he is so perfect and totally sounds like someone Ryan would know...and that "i could get you arrested" thing Chad said! Loved it.

OH and that conversation between Kelsey and Ryan was amazing, so real. I've seen people totally over do something like that or have the confidant have an embarrassing secret as well, something that could totally never happen [i can't think of an example at the moment but I’m sure you get my point.]

And your descriptions are phenomenal! The way Chad describes things, the way he describes his feelings! OMG!

Oh and Linus? That just goes with Chad, i think, such a perfect out in left field kind of name...you know what mean?

Oh and if you wanted to talk to me about my reviewing/brownnosing skills my e-mail is



-em

this is good

This is simply fantastic, enjoyed it from start to finish. I like your Chad and Ryan, it's nice to get to focus on just them and do other major melodrama. I love the idea of Linus and how he interprets different things so innocently, a few times there you had me crying laughing. Poor Chad, Ryan tortured him that day. This was a great story it flowed perfectly, and was nice and lengthy, so you enjoy the characters and flesh the story out. Thank you!

this was excellent. i loved the characterisations, especially little linus, and of course his description of chad's 'nightmares'. also, the story managed to be funny and very hot at the same time, which is a rarity in fic. basically, i loved it, and would love to see a sequel, with ryan having brunch with the danforths. pretty please?

amy. j x