Good Story, it's a shame you abandoned it.

good beginning to the story - you state you don't write sex scenes - fine (though I enjoy a graphic detailed scene as much as the next person if not more, - mind ** is way better than visual **) but such a story without a 'love' scene or 3 does not make sense.

great chapter

great chapter

I do hope that in time he rise's to his distiny as master of death

The cottage sounds like something you'd find in a painting.

Even with the bellywops figured in, I think Harry understands clearly how Ron has screwed up his relationship with Hermione.

For someone wo frightfully intelloigent, Hermione is rather dense where it comes to her feelings. She should have figured this out already.

I've lived through my wife's death, and as much as that hurt, I can only imagine how devastated George would be. Fred was more than a twin, he was George's other half. It'd be like having a part of your soul ripped away.

Rowling's slaughter-fest made absolutely no sense whatsoever. Of all the Weasleys, Fred and George were the least likely to be killed. Actually, after Ron, Percy was candidate number one. There was absolutely no reason for Tonks and Remus to die. Hedwig, at least, I can understand. She died protecting her best friend. (The departure from #4, was also as stupid a plan as I could ever imagine. "Here. We'll all carry stuffed owls. the Death Eaters won't shoot at the person carrying THE ONLY LIVE ONE, now will they?" I'm certain Rube Goldberg is rolling over in his grave at that!) The same goes for Moody. He at least took some of the bastards with him.

Rowling also seems to believe that punishment is not an important idea. After all, in the Crapilogue, Malfoy, a MARKED death Eater, is still an arrogant prick, and his parents never served a day in prison for their crimes. It's nice to see you're treating this more realistically.

Well, I hadn't quite expected that! Girlfriend or maybe we love each other', maybe, but I'd have expected Molly'd taught Ron the ins and outs of pureblood customs. Pregnancy is a definite upset. It does make sense, and I'm surprised Molly hasn't given Ron a ringing ear by now...or maybe she has.

Hermione is devastated. It's not like thy7 had a real relationship before, but Ron's actions are yet another betrayal. (Remind you of anyone?)

I honestly cannot understand Hermione's canon infatuation with a person who is clearly a dim-witted, lazy slacker. Hermione is driven to excel at whatever she does, and Ron constantly humiliates her for it. Yeah, that's the foundation for a loving relationship! SHEESH!

You go, Luna! Though not in her normal character, no one can really anticipate her actions. So many people underestimate her. I'd like to see her response if she *really* got angry.

I disagree with Harry's assessment ~"...There was no question that deep down Ron was a good bloke and would be a great friend to many..." Ron is selfish, and immature. He thinks only of his own comfort. IMHO, that's why he left them. He seemed to feel that a full belly and a warm bed were more important than helping his professed 'best mate', rid the world of a nearly immortal and utterly psychotic terrorist.

Harry, for all of his won emotional constipation, seems to know that the best thing for Hermione is to be there for her. If nothing else, as a shoulder to cry on.

And the shoe drops. I guess Xeno's injuries were too much. Best for all three to go together. ('Member what I said in Ch 1, about they would heal each other?)

While I can understand Harry's ire, he should understand that to a father, his children are the most important things in the universe. Nothing is to much when it comes to their health and welfare...not even betraying friends. It sucks but there it is.

You have to be careful having Vern running the Quibbler. I understand some of his articles will sound like...FANFICTION! *Snicker!* Is he going to rename it 'The Tumbled Weed'?

This just gets better and better!

Until next time, then.

Alorkin

I love the story so far!

So far so good!

One thing I’ll point out is characterization. And I have to admit that it is a case of ‘the pot calling the kettle black’. You need to give readers more information about your characters. I have a very bad habit of not doing more in that regard. Shinji in particular doesn’t get the attention that he deserves in my stories. What I’m getting at here is that I have no clue about your ancillary characters or how you may have changed them from cannon.

It doesn’t have to be a dead fall nuke, just little by little filling out the people that you introduce.

That’s my two cents :)

Lord Saturn

Wonderful start to your story. My favorite characters together are Harry with Hermione or Luna, or maybe both. I liked the slight Weasley bashing and am glad that Ginny is not with Harry. Can't wait to read the next chapter(s).

I can't wait to read more. What do you mean by emotional wall...is that a wall that separates them or binds them together from outside influences? WILL they find any magical mythical creatures...to finally prove Luna right or will it just be a Granger extraction?
POST MORE ASAP! Oh, and will they confront Ron and Susan?
Love ya,
Sam

I like this story! Luna has always seemed tome to be far more than she is written. She is my second favorite pairing for Harry, Hermione being the first and Tonks holding a close number three.

Her absolute honesty and disconcerting directness, puts many people off, but gives me a clean canvas.

I also believe that a three way relationship between Harry, Luna and Hermione would be amongst the strongest possible, with each leg bolstering the others and providing a foil for the peculiarities of all the partners. Both can heal Harry in different ways, and at the same time, they can heal each other.

All three have been neglected, and with harry and Hermione been abused. Harry's abuse is the full gamut, but Hermione's is much more subtle. Her abuse is the seeming lack of concern from her parents during her formative years. that lack of contact was, IMHO what caused her to seek out the library as a place of refuge. (personal experience, here!)

While Luna's solution is somewhat radical, it has it's appeal.

I have placed this fascinating fic on my alerts list and hope to read more at your convenience.
Alorkin

Harry was the only character that I recognized because I don’t follow HP. I have seen bits and pieces on TV, so I was able follow along well enough. Your superb writing helped too.

Although normally I wouldn’t start an HP story because of my lackluster interest in the series. But your putting Harry in a secluded cottage, alone with two pretty girls. Hm, works for me!

See ya next chapter.

Lord Saturn

Hidy hidy,

I'm intrigued to see how the relationship forms, to be honest. At the moment, Hermione seems to be pining after Ron, who may or may not have knocked up Romilda or Milicent.

Or the neighbor's cow... *Shifty eyes*

I liked seeing Luna having her own way about things, still. I'm hoping you didn't have her raped by Snatchers or Death Eaters, which I don't really suspect, but think happened in Canon (which is why Voldemort may find JKR while muggle hunting in my fics.)

I'm curious to find out why Harry didn't try to learn about the Hallows before tossing them. What they may or may not be able to do.

A few typo's, but nothing major.

One last thing to mention, is this going to end up turning into a time-travel fic? I know there's nothing to indicate that, but when I opened the page, for some reason, even though I had already read it and knew what was happening, I saw a whole plot of events where they went back so they could save lives of people that were lost. Weird, I know, but it may be the late hour catching up to me. My head is bobbing as I write, trying to keep time with the little line thingy where the letters form.

Adieu,

Paladeus

What is the big dark secret of Ron's?
I must know!

Please keep this story going.

Akolyte121

I'd like to review but there just isn't enough plot here yet to do so.