Holy pajamas. I seriously thought I reviewed this one. D: Stupid brain. Anyway, I want you to know that I have bawled my eyes out the first time and it still manages to make me cry like a baby. Argh. This fic is one of the ones I truly treasure on this site. Not because it's able to make me cry, but it's that emotion behind your word choice and that syntax of the sentences in the whole piece that just ties everything perfectly together to give these words power over the reader. I completely worship you and your family. XD. You keep it up!

Very well done and very in character. I could really feel the raw emotion Naruto was experiencing; from his earnest concern to his aching fears. I especially liked the lack of dialogue. Alot of times fics have so much crappy dialogue that it simply takes away from the story. Not so with yours. The sparse words creates an intense atmoshphere, and the communication becomes that much more weighty. Good attention to detail as well.

Seriously, I felt like I was Naruto in some aspects, which of course is good. When Sasuke wasn't in the bedroom my heart started beating faster. You really get caught up in everything and despite all the emotional baggage in the relationship between these two boys, you still managed to capture the compassion and tentative love they share. And the slight fluffyness at the end was nice too! ;)

This story is so full love, my heart was crying as I read this. It's beautiful, heartfelt - I couldn't help but put this into my favorites right away. This story just proves how Sasuke and Naruto completes each other. Thank you for writing this brilliant piece. ^^

Wow. this story is such a real, genuine account of every day instances. so truthful and raw and heartfelt. I love the detail in this story, and the fact that apologies and forgiveness set a sweet and waning conclusion. It was perfect.Thanks for another awesome story.

I swear I could feel Naruto's emotions. My heart ached for him. I love your writing. You did a great job on this one.

Beautiful and sad. Not to mention gloriously written. 100/10 XD

I'm gonna have to make this short because I spent the longest time reviewing your other fic, but this made me smile.
I love how Sasuke and Naruto express their love by so-not expressing it.
They were very much in character - I already told you this, but I adore your ability to write AU fics that are almost canon because Sasuke and Naruto are just so accurately portrayed.
This is one of the fics I mentioned where nothing much happens with the plot, but you packed in so much emotion and detail that I feel like I've witnessed fantastic development in their relationship.
And it's fluffily beautiful too - just reminds of what a genuinely awesome pairing Naruto and Sasuke make.
Well done!

-CC

Oh god...I teared up so many times towards the ending. So angsty, yet beautifully written. I can already picture Naruto's broken and defeated expression, and I really want to hug him for that. My baby... T__T

All of your stories are refreshing and have many of lessons in life. Because there's a greater force out there working not just what people's want.

Sometimes, it takes a lot to accept...

Keep up the wonderful work and take care.

~M

Rasengan-sama!!

I have missed you! It would figure though, that the idiot that I am wouldn't think you'd make a new ff account. The old one was still in my favorites, so looking for any kind of update there was pretty retarded.

I'm so happy to see a ton of fics I've yet to read! I know what I'll be doing this weekend =) ANYWHONESS! On to the review!!

I thought this story was beautifully written. The atmosphere of the bar, the different thoughts that flitted through Naruto's head, the scenery, all of it was magnificent. And as far as getting the reader's emotions involved, I was pissed at the way Sasuke was acting because Naruto was late. Given the situation I can understand where both parties are coming from, Naruto having to work late to sustain how they're living, and Sasuke feeling upset over Naruto not being home.

But just because your lover is late coming home does not mean you can go to a bar and have some guy chat you up and then tell him to call you when your pissed off boyfriend is standing behind you. Uh-uh Sasuke, not cool. But naruto took like a trooper, even though he had typical jealous lover behavior, wanting to punch the innocent flirter in the face (I'm more then sure he had no idea Sasuke was spoken for). Unless you know for a fact that the person chatting up your lover knows that you two are an item, they shouldn't be attacked =/

As much as I was pissed at Sasuke, I was anxious for Naruto, I didn't want to have to read about his heart being torn from his chest with Sasuke leaving him =(

That last scene though, after they've left the bar and made it home, it was so very sweet and touching and you could feel the love between them. It was definately my favorite part of the story =)

I'm so happy about getting to read more of your fics! I really hope everything is going well for you =)

Until my next review, XOXOXs, awesome fic, and I look forward to reading more from ya!

dear Raz,

long time.

an hour ago, i was home alone, no social contact, no piece of sanity, left with lots of things i had to do and no motivation to do them. i was wandering aimlessly, literally, walking about the house. zombie. finding nothing that could keep me still. no game of mario kart, no guitar playing, not even a Murakami book.

i picked up my brother's macbook, remembered you oddly, and sat still for the longest time i have all day. reading this.

i like it a lot, Raz. the desperate tones of Naruto's insecurity, his helpless obsession with pleasing Sasuke, who is almost impossible to please, his eyes pleading -don'tleaveme-, his self-admittance, self-awareness that he, with no exception, just simply cannot live without Sasuke. not like he wants to.

and Sasuke is oblivious, immature almost. physically, so sure of himself, so ludicrously grown-up on the outside, ludicrously knowledgeable on how to control the feelings of others, and yet still so, so oblivious to Naruto's thoughts - the thoughts that matter. the thoughts that lie beyond anger and agitation and love; thoughts of anxiety and worryful premonitions. thoughts that he can't see because Naruto is trying so hard, so urgently to keep buried, and at the same time, trying so urgently to scream it out to him.

it's beautiful, Raz.

and your narrative is just how it should be - a narrative. i love present tense. i love scraps of sidetracks, senseless pieces of irrelevant information, of potted plants, africans and three-legged dogs, that i find so common in your stories. you're clever, Raz. they build it, make it, remind silly us that this is not a story. this is a life written down with a human mind behind those characters. i like the last one especially, the subtle one, the one that doesn't try as hard to be unique as a three-legged dog, and yet has the most effect on me. i'm talking about the hint of laziness with setting the DVD player clock.

your sentences are short throughout. i don't know why, but i like that. i think it keeps a slightly somber feel without making things sound jerky or abstract. it's the words you choose.

i'm sorry Raz. i have to stop soon - my sister's getting home and i need to make dinner.

just know that...you're scaring me, Raz. you're getting good at this. you're leaving me behind; this silly little fifteen year old girl who used to boast. i'm scared that one day my reviews and my words will stop meaning anything to you, to anyone anymore. out of my league. i think that's what they call it.

there are many things i like about this piece, but maybe i can comment on those later, on other writings where i'm sure your best flairs will be again. i'll wait for them.

thank you, Raz. i hope you don't mind me calling you Raz still. i feel rude.

i have to go steam broccoli now.

yours.


p.s.
hi.

I love your writing style. Your descriptions are so complete; your little details add so much...I don't know the right word for it...but they're nice, sophisticated touches to the story.

Relatively speaking, not much is going on with the plot, but you work it so well. You make it something. You tugged my emotions in the right places, made me wonder what was going to happen in others. Naruto's feelings become very relatable.

I loved the story, plain and simple. I would expect nothing less from you. Thanks so much for the great read!

-IntertwinedxDestinies

wow. that was amazing, i absolutly loved it.
i really liked how it was written, and how well the emotions of the story got through, it was as if you were the character and not just reading a story like it is with most. thank you for writing this, it was magnificent.
-Kiiroi desu

Man, I love your stuf.. the detail, the softness... the silences that you can actually hear.. I know I sound like a tard but never mind.. ALSO, thanks for naming all those chapters in Lost In Translation after those Shiny Toy Guns songs, cause it turns out I really like them.
But yeah, I particularly like all the body language and the way they act around each other and how even though there's love there it's not going to always be perfect and stuff.. Thanks for writing this :)

Wow. The sensory imagery in this is incredible. What a rich, elegant piece of writing. It's hard to maintain that level of unfaltering detail throughout. I was really touched by this piece. It really resonated with me. Thank you for taking the time to write this.