I think I like this better than what Kripke did. Good job. Although I have one problem, Ruby's a demon, why'd you make her weaker just because she has a smaller body?

Wow. Still just as good as the first time. And in a story full of uniformly excellent writing, this phrase, for some reason, just lit me up like a pinball machine.

"pushing up with shaky, coltish, newly-occupied legs"

That's just so perfect. Beautifully accurate and dead easy to "see" in my mind's eye.

You're a good writer, kid. Ever consider an MFA? (inside Garrison Keillor joke)

:D

Fabulous job--really intriguing from the get-go, and some of it still might have happened this way. I really enjoyed your command of language, even in moments you might have thrown away but didn't: "He trussed and gagged the inner voice that screamed betrayal! at the back of his eyes, the Dean who still lived on in his mind looking out through him at the girl-demon touching his car" is a terrific example, and Sam's the thought about the iPod player-thingy is another.

I'll definitely look for more of your work, so I hope you'll keep posting on ff. Thanks for sharing.

I Loved That and i Hope u do more good job