wah...

a great fanfic...

could you make a sequel please...

Not far from there, the Hyoutei boys stood on a hill where Atobe’s mansion was, and thought that Seigaku was really a laps-obsessed team.

Lol! Love that!

And: Tezuka made a giant tennis ball.

How surprising.

I love the humour; and it's lighthearted while dealing with Seigaku splitting up.

A few English mistakes; I've listed the more outstanding ones below as well as a few plot holes. Rereading always helps before you post something. (Unless you're reviewing, :) )

The look of utter horror Tezuka Kunimitsu could ever allow on his face had made Fuji forgot how weird the actual taste of the ice was.

Could ever allow? Not a phrase. And Tezuka did drink a whole glass of Inui juice and remain unaffected. Why would he be affected by the usual sight of Fuji enjoying Inui juice?

He just wished Atobe’s mansion would still be in full shape after the party.

It should be "He just hoped Atobe's mansion would still be in _(one piece)_ after the party." Not wish. And "full shape" is not a phrase.

Tezuka wondered if Atobe would let him assigned Oshitari some laps.

Should be "Tezuka wondered if Atobe would let him assign Oshitari laps."

“… Ne, Tezuka, have you seen your sneezing pic?"

Not proper English- “… Ne, Tezuka, have you seen the photograph of you sneezing?"

Outside the window, the snowflakes kept slowly descending from the sky above, silently watching the two teenagers who went on chattering warmly on the other side of the window.

Tezuka wasn't really chattering. It was only Fuji.

They turned to the direction where the ball came from and found Kikumaru grinning ear-to-ear.

turned in. Also, the ball? There was only one ball and it could hit both their heads?

He ducked quickly and saved his face from the darting snowball, and said white object had successfully hit the left-side of the only freshmen.

Again, English. Technically, Echizen wouldn't be a freshman anymore since they've finished the year.

“Let our sensei judge then.”

Coaches, not sensei.

After having an arcade on DDR (which ended up in another acrobatic contest between Kikumaru and Gakuto), playing some board games (Oishi was such a difficult opponent to beat in Monopoly, by the way), card games (Tezuka, Fuji, Oshitari, and Inui were quite dominating in playing bullshit) and such, they were starting to get tired—Echizen and Jiroh had even fallen asleep on the couch. Ryuuzaki-sensei decided that it was time for them to go back to their villa because the Hyoutei boys must have been tired too.

Oishi was a difficult opponent. There is no need to put "such". ...were dominating in playing bullshit. There's no need for "quite".
If you want to continue with the parentheses, put, after Jiroh (not that the latter was surprsing).

Tezuka got a pair of indigo gloves from Echizen...

gloves have a size. How would Echizen know who the gloves would go to? Grip tape would be better.

Nice ending though.

Good story! I like when the whole team is doing something besides tennis together.

Wouldn't Captain Tezuka or the bus driver have yelled at the noisy regulars to be quiet? Wouldn't Oishi help with that too?

Captain Tezuka and Fuji sure got lucky to get a room together. Maybe they should have put Momoshiro and Kaidou in separate rooms so there wouldn't be so much fighting. That was funny about Echizen trying to remember about Seigaku captains assigning laps. I guess he still doesn't know he would be back in the U.S., and thinks he will be captain two years later.

That was creative to call the frozen juice "Snow White." It's good you also put in some myths and legends related to winter and snow.

You also brought in Hyotei in a good way: good surprise! I guess they and Seigaku weren't too far from each other if the snowballs hit. I was laughing at the snowball or people-ball tumbling thing, and how Captain Tezuka wanted to assign Oshitari laps. However, he wouldn't give laps just because someone hit him with snowballs. He knows they were just playing around. If he did assign laps, he would only do it to Fuji since he was the one who planned it. Besides, how are they going to run laps around a villa? Wouldn't it be too big?

If Captain Atobe's mansion falls apart, it would probably serve him right for being rude and arrogant. However, it might not bother him, because he'll probably just order his servants to take care of everything.

I think you described the characters well, especially in the snow-shaping contest and gift exchange. How do you sleep on a snowbed? Wouldn't it be too cold and get you all wet?

Good idea for a group picture! I don't really like poses, so their way was more natural, and I like hwo you showed that the team was like a good family. The scenes and conversations about departure and separation nearly drove me to tears.

Kawaii!

Certainly, the best fanfic of PoT that I have ever read yet!

Hope you keep up the good work and still have that motivation!

I wish I can write those kind of things too...

And good idea to put some hyoutei scenes there especially the rolling snowball part...
(Poor Shishido)

kawaii

that was so cute...there weren't any romantic events though...but still it really made me crack and laugh now and then...this story is amazingly great...

and by the way i looked at the 'pictures' and they were really cute...

Yukionna itu yg di Conan 50 itu kan?

Keren..keren..PIC-NYA MANTAPH..

Cute fic. I love it. :D

i like this story!!
so funny!!
but still make me cry when you explain the photo's that Ryuuzaki-sensei take before they back to Tokyo..
huhu..

still!! i like the part Fuji disguise as the Yuki-Onna..
hahahaha!!
poor Tezuka!!

and when Ryoma said this..

“I wonder if they’re skiing or playing circus,” Echizen commented while calmly gulping down his grape ponta, acting like he was enjoying a show or something.

and also..
when Tezuka, Fuji, Eiji and Shishido falling down and become a BIG snow ball!!

'Oshitari couldn’t help but to be amused at the sight of the two strongest players on Seigaku—plus their pet cat—falling forward like a rolling stone, until they finally hit an unsuspecting Shishido—who made a rather ungracious yelping sound—in the process and proceeded to roll forward…'

Kyaa! Kyaa! Kyaa! That was so wonderful! All that fluff and humor! (squealing happily and laughing hard) Wah, there were so many awesome parts! I'd quote my favorite lines, but then I'd basically be copying the whole thing XD Can't pick out my favorite one either- I love them all! I was kinda expecting Fuji to be standing outside Tezuka's door when he called, but that's alright since they'll be together soon...(sighs happily). Love this!

Oh yeah, the pictures for this are so pretty! Such gorgeous colors ^.^ Ooh, I saw the TeFu angel sketches too! (faints from the sheer awesomeness) Those are so beautiful!

Aww, the whole team together for the holidays! :D And the memories...I think I know how Fuji feels...sort of...XD

:D

~PT

Ahh~ the cute bits, and the fluff bits. And the typical-Tezuka-laps-bits.

It gives me more warm fuzzy feelings, even though all it does is rain where I live. I DEMAND SNOW. *shot*

~forexampled

Aw! This is such a good story. I love the snow making competition. The pictures are really cute too.

So cute. I truly enjoyed reading it. :D

Aww...this was so sweet! And the accompanying fanart was perfect! Ah, the photos!
Great job.